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Forsaking .....lovemaking
Vow taking -
Forsaking
Bed-breaking,
Child-making,
Claim-staking,
Crotch-aching,
Dead-waking,
Earth-quaking,
Fire-raking,
Lust-slaking,
Painstaking,
Piece-making,
Room-shaking,
Sweat-making,
Time-taking,
Unfaking
Lovemaking-
Heartbreaking!
Forsaking
Bed-breaking,
Child-making,
Claim-staking,
Crotch-aching,
Dead-waking,
Earth-quaking,
Fire-raking,
Lust-slaking,
Painstaking,
Piece-making,
Room-shaking,
Sweat-making,
Time-taking,
Unfaking
Lovemaking-
Heartbreaking!
Published 23rd Mar 2013
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23rd Mar 2013 2:05pm
Now that's an original use of words and paints a very vivid picture. good write poet!
24th Mar 2013 11:02am
solomon what you evoke makes me think like im reading shakespeares work,congratulations hope to work with you
24th Mar 2013 12:52pm
From beginning to end, the pleasures and pains of love. Nicely done Solomon.
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24th Mar 2013 4:52pm
Solomon_Song this is thought provoking makes me adds more of what you wrote, the use of wording is very inviting to do so..
great piece
great piece
31st Mar 2013 3:41pm
14th Jul 2013 2:09am
It is odd how I haven't came in contact with your work before.
This is a marvelous piece. I absolutely love how you used so many, yet so few words to describe and paint a picture describing the "pleasures and pains of love" as Magdalena said.
This is a marvelous piece. I absolutely love how you used so many, yet so few words to describe and paint a picture describing the "pleasures and pains of love" as Magdalena said.
