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a sigh as the needle slides in
we know what's coming
(pun intended)
skin on skin
what ever you've got
I now have
and vice versa
let us share poisons and fluid
(open your mouth)
a gasp as the liquid is set free
into the system
(my grasp like a tourniquet around your neck)
let go
and then let go
take it
"you like this don't you?"
(I'd have you no other way)
be still
and take it
we know what's coming
(pun intended)
skin on skin
what ever you've got
I now have
and vice versa
let us share poisons and fluid
(open your mouth)
a gasp as the liquid is set free
into the system
(my grasp like a tourniquet around your neck)
let go
and then let go
take it
"you like this don't you?"
(I'd have you no other way)
be still
and take it
Published 21st Sep 2010
| Edited 23rd Sep 2010
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Anonymous
21st Sep 2010 2:54pm
A strange poem... Tender yet brutal, as though the predator loves his victim, and the victim has accepted the predator's act, enjoys it even. I loved the tourniquet image.
23rd Sep 2010 5:54am
hmm "strange" huh? is it different from my usual stuff? just wondering how you're reading it.. yeah the tourniquet image.. using the drug metaphor for love again.. some themes i use again and again till i've worn them raw.. beaten to a pulp heh.. but writing is a cleansing process for me so I'm sure you understand.. oh and i'm sure you've guessed my most recent poems are inspired by laura.. unfortunately she'll be leaving soon.. but it's been a fucking blast man.. good thing me and her will be back on msn :D ttys ya bud.. thanks for the comment
Anonymous
23rd Sep 2010 9:12pm
Strange as in the juxtaposition of opposite ideas, like tenderness and brutality. Oh yes I know that creation for you is like confession. It is for me too. That cleansed feeling is what I yearn for when I write close to the bone. Yes, that's a point, you'll still see Laura all the time on msn, so though you won't have her physically, you'll be able to hear her voice and see her face. Thank God for technology, eh? And I'm sure your crotch can take one more for the team until December comes around. :P
26th Sep 2010 9:55pm
you know my forte is the juxtaposition :) i love it.. it's really a "talent" that idk how or when it became realized.. but i love it..
my crotch? will have a lonely ache until dec.. my crotch took too much time already taking it for the team.. fuck those god damn higher ups.. i'll shove my cock down THEIR throats till they suffocate
28th Sep 2010 7:16pm
'take it' fuck i love that phrase (I can imagine your voice saying it whenever i read it)...it's intimate and possessive and comforting and so powerful, all at once.
28th Sep 2010 9:43pm
"take it" kinda stolen from tool.. you have the album.. song four degrees:
Take it all.
Take it all in.
All the way in.
Let it go.
Let it go in.
You won't feel what you'd like to feel.
Lay back and let me show you another way.
Take it up higher.
4 degrees warmer.
Give in now
and let me in.
You'll like this in
Don't pull it out.
It brings us closer than
dying and cancer and crying.
Come on .
You can take it all.
Just like that.
(glad you can hear my voice saying it.. i love the phrase too.. i love all the imagery it conjures from my meaning and maynards)
