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Dreams
I wanted you - in sweet DREAMS
I called you with my heart WIDE OPEN
I touched you under CARAMEL sheets
And tasted your sex with candied LIPS
As your eyes met mine the waters inside - called you to DRINK
Were you thirsty my LOVE
Were my SHORES inviting
Did my waters intoxicate you or leaving you WANTING MORE...
I called you with my heart WIDE OPEN
I touched you under CARAMEL sheets
And tasted your sex with candied LIPS
As your eyes met mine the waters inside - called you to DRINK
Were you thirsty my LOVE
Were my SHORES inviting
Did my waters intoxicate you or leaving you WANTING MORE...
Published 8th Mar 2013
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8th Mar 2013 5:01pm
I liked it so far-yet I certainly wanted more. Another eight line verse with two more four line metaphors,perhaps answering some of the questions, would have been perfect (for me, at least).
8th Mar 2013 9:45pm
8th Mar 2013 10:04pm
Would have liked it a little longer too! Favourite lines:
As your eyes met mine the waters inside - called you to DRINK
Were my SHORES inviting?
As your eyes met mine the waters inside - called you to DRINK
Were my SHORES inviting?
9th Mar 2013 1:04pm
