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To my friend Emily Dixie (on her death)
Don’t be Plath
Don’t be, Emily
Reach out and grab hold of me
Breathe, please breathe
and be.
Dance between the flowers and the trees
In the new English sun.
Don’t be Virginia,
Please, be, Emily,
Breathe and be breathed.
Don’t be, Emily
Reach out and grab hold of me
Breathe, please breathe
and be.
Dance between the flowers and the trees
In the new English sun.
Don’t be Virginia,
Please, be, Emily,
Breathe and be breathed.
Published 7th Mar 2013
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7th Mar 2013 4:18pm
8th Mar 2013 9:44am
I am unaware of any 5 year olds who know who Sylvia Plath or Virginia Woolf are, or the circumstances of their deaths, so that seems like a weird question to ask.
10th Mar 2013 6:07am
Short and sweet. Yes the references to the legendary ladies of ink is obvious to me and draws out the topic of suicide clearly. It apparently is a personal poem and I won't comment on length (lack of), enough is said to touch someone who has dealt with a similar situation
Obviously the person who commented before wrote a horrible critique, 'my two year old niece could write a better critism'. They didn't state any reasons why they thought the poem wasn't good. They resorted to a cliche childish insult that has been recycled many times. I think that person was trying to put down instead of giving true constructive critism. Comments like are not worth reading for there is nothing to be gained.
Good job grimdark_django, hopefully you find this helpful and learn to learn from anything that is helpful.
Obviously the person who commented before wrote a horrible critique, 'my two year old niece could write a better critism'. They didn't state any reasons why they thought the poem wasn't good. They resorted to a cliche childish insult that has been recycled many times. I think that person was trying to put down instead of giving true constructive critism. Comments like are not worth reading for there is nothing to be gained.
Good job grimdark_django, hopefully you find this helpful and learn to learn from anything that is helpful.
