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Love=broken
I’m screaming, but you only hear silence through my cries. I’m not strong enough… I’m breaking like falling glass. Love is overlooked and forgotten, like me. I’m just a shadow in the past, a lost cause. I’m invisible, like the air I breathe. I’ll try to make it through the day, and maybe make it out alive. This place is a glimpse of hell and the darkness it shows is like my soul, the light no longer dwells here. I wish it did. I don’t know how to get it back. How do I forget the pain? How do I move on from the lies? How do I trust anyone with anything because of you??!? I wish I could have hurt you when I had the chance, but that chance is gone. Now the pain will just lie in the cuts on my arm and the scars that they hold. I’ll never forget the pain. I’ll remember everything, forever. When I know you’ll forget it all. <3
Published 6th Mar 2013
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6th Mar 2013 4:38pm
6th Mar 2013 4:41pm
6th Mar 2013 5:23pm
Welcome to DU. You wrote a heart-renching, sadder than hell poem. You have talent, but it is straight forward and consistent: no hidden mysteries, no real metaphors. An expression of the way you feel. I like that. But just 2 suggestions (and they are soul ones, like the "light in the soul" you feel you lost. 1. You didn't. It might be a bit dimmer. But the light is ALWAYS there, like the Big Bang. 2. Just a suggestion,again, ever try to forgive him? Just a suggestion. Just a suggestion.
marcella1
marcella1
6th Mar 2013 6:54pm
thank you so much for your input <3 it really means a lot... and I'm trying to forgive him...just 2 1/2 years of emotional abuse and at the he made it seem like it was all my fault... :/
