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What Cuts, It's Spoken too.
The handle,
gleaming.
Under the fluorescent light.
The base of the blade,
stained
in crimson red.
Its point,
the rest of its edge
and the centre
of the knife,
buried in her heart.
The Vic,
her name was Christine.
She's been renamed
Victim Number 3.
Her forearms hanging
over the edge of the bath.
the water dripping
from her
blue-black finger nails,
well and truly dead.
"We're finished in here"
Yeah, Johnno.
She's finished.
"Don't get smart, Marcus.
have a word
with her kid."
Leaving the forensics
to their spoils
"Hey Son,
you hid in the Oven?"
He told me 'yeah'
the boy was scared shitless.
"I'm sorry, son."
My forced attempt
to comfort a
Twelve year old boy.
He said to me
'Why do people say that?
That they're sorry.
You're not sorry,
you should say suck shit
that your mum is dead.'
The kid made his point
he made it
very well.
Not a damn word
held meaning.
I had a job to do.
gleaming.
Under the fluorescent light.
The base of the blade,
stained
in crimson red.
Its point,
the rest of its edge
and the centre
of the knife,
buried in her heart.
The Vic,
her name was Christine.
She's been renamed
Victim Number 3.
Her forearms hanging
over the edge of the bath.
the water dripping
from her
blue-black finger nails,
well and truly dead.
"We're finished in here"
Yeah, Johnno.
She's finished.
"Don't get smart, Marcus.
have a word
with her kid."
Leaving the forensics
to their spoils
"Hey Son,
you hid in the Oven?"
He told me 'yeah'
the boy was scared shitless.
"I'm sorry, son."
My forced attempt
to comfort a
Twelve year old boy.
He said to me
'Why do people say that?
That they're sorry.
You're not sorry,
you should say suck shit
that your mum is dead.'
The kid made his point
he made it
very well.
Not a damn word
held meaning.
I had a job to do.
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Re: What Cuts, It's Spoken too.
3rd Mar 2013 6:33am
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3rd Mar 2013 6:35am
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3rd Mar 2013 7:34am
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3rd Mar 2013 7:36am
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Anonymous
3rd Mar 2013 10:21am
Well done with this piece...easily pictured.
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3rd Mar 2013 10:26am
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Anonymous
4th Mar 2013 7:07am
Wow..love how you related this heavy weighted sentiment in such a near carefree way-like a metaphor in itself...well done!
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4th Mar 2013 7:15am
Finally, somebody picked up on it :-) Thanks for the keen eye Mikimoondancer! :-) Aha yeah, that's basically my style, down play the scene and bring it home. :-)
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Anonymous
4th Mar 2013 8:02am
A powerful write, Evan. Enjoyed this piece a lot. :)
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4th Mar 2013 8:05am
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6th Mar 2013 1:06am
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6th Mar 2013 1:11am
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8th Mar 2013 4:50pm
I can totally picture Christopher Walken and Harvey Keitel acting out this scene!
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re: Re: What Cuts, It's Spoken too.
9th Mar 2013 1:02am
Haha, did I spark some memories of something similar? Aha, thanks for stopping by. :-)
Re: What Cuts, It's Spoken too.
9th Mar 2013 4:10am
Lol-- there was some movie that Harvey was in and he played a hitman who cleaned up his messes by cutting his victims up and wheeling them out in suitcases to make disposal easy and be inconspicuous in public, but I can't remember the name of the movie . Christopher Walken--he's just creepy all the time, no matter what role he plays !
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re: Re: What Cuts, It's Spoken too.
9th Mar 2013 6:13am
That's damn similar to my piece, aha. When you remember the movie be sure to tell me, haha. Sounds like my kind of film! :-)
Re: What Cuts, It's Spoken too.
9th Mar 2013 2:50pm
I think it was "Prizzi's Honor"--a black comedy about hitmen and Harvey was the "clean up" guy who went around disposing of everyone's messes. LOL
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10th Mar 2013 00:17am