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Life wonders
I wonder why
you don't like me at times
I only give you
what the bell gives the chime
you don't like me at times
I only give you
what the bell gives the chime
Published 1st Mar 2013
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Anonymous
- Edited 2nd Mar 2013 00:07am
2nd Mar 2013 00:06am
I love originality & there is freshness of thought in this piece. Which makes it memorable. That "Life wonders" and senses our disharmony with its life-giving force or principles. Indicated by "what the bell gives the chime" ... the music or the harmony of sound.
A great message in this piece, Scot. Life is left wondering why humanity is out of harmony with its best intentions. When the "bell" [of existence] offers only harmony. This is the takeaway, from the poem, for me. Huge thought contained in only four lines. Some times a short poem can say a great deal. This one certainly achieves that. Wonderful work!!! :)
Carlene
A great message in this piece, Scot. Life is left wondering why humanity is out of harmony with its best intentions. When the "bell" [of existence] offers only harmony. This is the takeaway, from the poem, for me. Huge thought contained in only four lines. Some times a short poem can say a great deal. This one certainly achieves that. Wonderful work!!! :)
Carlene
2nd Mar 2013 00:19am
Thank you so much, I knew you would get the bell and the chime., sometimes the obvious is so hard for us to see! Thank you again Carlene, for your continuing support of my efforts, your feedback has been very important in my growth as a writer..
Cheers! Scot
Cheers! Scot
