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This Pattern
This pattern,
Invisible to all,
Except one.
She knows.
She's determined.
She won't end up,
Like those before her.
She'll break the cycle,
She'll be happy,
She'll be free.
They all will.
Invisible to all,
Except one.
She knows.
She's determined.
She won't end up,
Like those before her.
She'll break the cycle,
She'll be happy,
She'll be free.
They all will.
Published 1st Mar 2013
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2nd Mar 2013 2:05am
2nd Mar 2013 3:07am
Very nice use of anaphora, it befits the poem's meaning very well. Also, amazing job breaking up the lines--I have rarely ever seen a poem so beautifully divided so that it makes such perfect sense, as yours demonstrates quite well. It's short and concise, but it gets to the point. And just as the cherry on top, so to speak, it has a very easy to identify with theme. I love it.
2nd Mar 2013 11:22am
10th Apr 2013 00:56am
Quite a shame, really, that no one else has commented on this aside from me and Destiny. HINT HINT PEOPLES!!!
10th Apr 2013 1:24am
