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THE PATH
THE PATH:
I sit in a room full of people, yet i'm still alone
I wish to follow life's flow, yet i am a stone
When i speak, i feel no one hears
When i listen, the sound is only fear
In the mirror, i see nothing but sadness and hate
Shall i just turn away? will that change my fate?
Can i just be my self? can i shun all advice?
I can give in to conformity, Maybe that will suffice
I don't want to change, but it leaves one choice only
To live out my days, and be forever lonely
Morbid lucy
I sit in a room full of people, yet i'm still alone
I wish to follow life's flow, yet i am a stone
When i speak, i feel no one hears
When i listen, the sound is only fear
In the mirror, i see nothing but sadness and hate
Shall i just turn away? will that change my fate?
Can i just be my self? can i shun all advice?
I can give in to conformity, Maybe that will suffice
I don't want to change, but it leaves one choice only
To live out my days, and be forever lonely
Morbid lucy
Published 28th Feb 2013
| Edited 1st Mar 2013
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Anonymous
28th Feb 2013 9:34am
Cool poem, morbidlucy.
Like the metaphors used in here.
Fave lines:
*When i speak, i feel no one hears
When i listen, the sound is only fear
(Interesting position of the word "only")
Small thing, if I may:
can i shun all advise?
(last word could be...advice, maybe? And caps on the pronoun...I)
Pen on, poet!
Thanks for sharing :)
Cheers
Tidespotter
Ps. Did you intend to write this as one paragraph?
Just asking, ok.
Like the metaphors used in here.
Fave lines:
*When i speak, i feel no one hears
When i listen, the sound is only fear
(Interesting position of the word "only")
Small thing, if I may:
can i shun all advise?
(last word could be...advice, maybe? And caps on the pronoun...I)
Pen on, poet!
Thanks for sharing :)
Cheers
Tidespotter
Ps. Did you intend to write this as one paragraph?
Just asking, ok.
1st Mar 2013 1:59am
Anonymous
28th Feb 2013 8:54pm
Change can be a bitch of a thing, but.. if it makes you happy? Suck it up, cupcake! Nicely done, GL.
1st Mar 2013 2:01am
