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that enternal dream
yes we have sinned
and harmed others
and now we make our own prison
for every mistake
is an eternity of living to pay
in life or in dreams
like some hindu reprimand
we may have to pass through the doors
of the dreams world
and live another million times
because as that fucker once said
"we know not what we do"
and harmed others
and now we make our own prison
for every mistake
is an eternity of living to pay
in life or in dreams
like some hindu reprimand
we may have to pass through the doors
of the dreams world
and live another million times
because as that fucker once said
"we know not what we do"
Published 3rd Sep 2010
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Anonymous
3rd Sep 2010 1:19am
Lucid, complex poem. The Hindu reference was clever, and I like your dismissal of God as "that fucker," like he's a bad father. Which, of course, he is.
I think you should knock the "s" off of "dreams world," but that's the only flaw here.
I think you should knock the "s" off of "dreams world," but that's the only flaw here.
3rd Sep 2010 4:00am
actually jesus was "that fucker"... he was the one that said "father forgive them for they know not what they do" while he was on the cross.. or so the tabloids read..
Anonymous
3rd Sep 2010 5:10am
Ah okay. I really need to bone up on my Christian theology haha. My old Sunday school teacher is no doubt spinning in her sleep...
4th Sep 2010 6:04pm
4th Sep 2010 8:39pm
people that are in prison sometimes get a spider web tattoo to signify feeling trapped
