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The Clockwork Madrigal
**For the Edgar Allan Poe ala The Raven contest**
Dreaming murmur,
as weary volumes
wrought open, whispered,
once forgotten chamber doors
from a stir of words—purple
the tongue silken hours
Souls always gather
like an echo's tongues,
where Lenore lay dying...
For centuries,
minutes like embers—
seconds burning
a demons harvest
for a glimpse
into and
beyond this world
and the scars
of nevermore.
The floor is weak
where ghosts
don once mortal shades,
restless
murmured the sunset
whispering names,
ebony-black words
beckoning us e'er
unto Mother Night.
Uley
Dreaming murmur,
as weary volumes
wrought open, whispered,
once forgotten chamber doors
from a stir of words—purple
the tongue silken hours
Souls always gather
like an echo's tongues,
where Lenore lay dying...
For centuries,
minutes like embers—
seconds burning
a demons harvest
for a glimpse
into and
beyond this world
and the scars
of nevermore.
The floor is weak
where ghosts
don once mortal shades,
restless
murmured the sunset
whispering names,
ebony-black words
beckoning us e'er
unto Mother Night.
Uley
Published 23rd Feb 2013
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Anonymous
23rd Feb 2013 1:44pm
Well done uley...good luck in the comp
strider
For centuries,
minutes like embers—
seconds burning
a demons harvest
excellent lines
strider
For centuries,
minutes like embers—
seconds burning
a demons harvest
excellent lines
24th Feb 2013 8:43am
Anonymous
23rd Feb 2013 3:04pm
Uley, youre a genius! This makes me want to run up the attic and read all my Poe and lovecraft books. Thanks for this one and good luck in the competition!
24th Feb 2013 8:55am
I started reading Poe fairly early, and Lovecraft moreso in my early teen years.I still enjoy reading them both from time to time, and it is usually enough of a provocation to see a movie that trends to suggest that a director/Hollywood script-writer have not actually read them, but chose to include one of their names in the title credits (kind of like they are trying to blame one of them for what they did).
Any rate, that I might even provoke some one of my own readers to reading either of those two (I still have a slight preference for Poe, as he seemed to have a far better range and depth. Lovecraft was still better at tantalizing the imagination though) I would consider to be a pretty good thing.
Thank you very much Mourgana, I am glad that you enjoyed this write.
Uley
Any rate, that I might even provoke some one of my own readers to reading either of those two (I still have a slight preference for Poe, as he seemed to have a far better range and depth. Lovecraft was still better at tantalizing the imagination though) I would consider to be a pretty good thing.
Thank you very much Mourgana, I am glad that you enjoyed this write.
Uley
24th Feb 2013 7:54am
24th Feb 2013 9:22am
I suspect that it might be a case of apples and oranges 13, as compare and contrast rarely ever works with writing. This contest was kind of like my natural element, which certainly wouldn't down anything you wrote...
It is one of the reasons that I do not try to start any competitions of my own. I mean, how do you decide really which write is better? For some, a tight bit of verse; for others, content--and well... if it were merely about writing cues/prompts, as opposed to trying to sort through all of the talent, it still really only breaks down to a matter of personal taste/preferences.
I've only won like one contest since I have been here. It was never really a matter of winning for me, as I enjoyed the suggested writing exercise/challenge, whatever you may choose to call it.
That being said, if there is something that YOU do not like about what is going on with your writing--figure out what it is or feel free to ask. I am hardly the grand wise one on the subject, yet while there are certainly better folk to ask about it, I would definitely help out where I thought I might. Given that you don't/haven't, I would likely not assume it. Hey Brother, I may be kind of arrogant when it comes to writing, as in I write how & what I like here, and all-- but that is way out of my league, to suggest that I have anything more going on than anyone else around here. It's just kind of the old dog, new tricks sort of axiom-- I do what I do, and one can still choose whether to read my ramblings or not (though I definitely listen to those points made in others' critiques.)
Otherwise, just love it (otherwise, why do it), nourish it (with learning, knowledge) and let it go. Isn't anyone getting paid around here, that I am aware of leastwise, for what they are tacking up on this site.
Okay, I'm done now. Thanks for stopping by 13.
Uley
It is one of the reasons that I do not try to start any competitions of my own. I mean, how do you decide really which write is better? For some, a tight bit of verse; for others, content--and well... if it were merely about writing cues/prompts, as opposed to trying to sort through all of the talent, it still really only breaks down to a matter of personal taste/preferences.
I've only won like one contest since I have been here. It was never really a matter of winning for me, as I enjoyed the suggested writing exercise/challenge, whatever you may choose to call it.
That being said, if there is something that YOU do not like about what is going on with your writing--figure out what it is or feel free to ask. I am hardly the grand wise one on the subject, yet while there are certainly better folk to ask about it, I would definitely help out where I thought I might. Given that you don't/haven't, I would likely not assume it. Hey Brother, I may be kind of arrogant when it comes to writing, as in I write how & what I like here, and all-- but that is way out of my league, to suggest that I have anything more going on than anyone else around here. It's just kind of the old dog, new tricks sort of axiom-- I do what I do, and one can still choose whether to read my ramblings or not (though I definitely listen to those points made in others' critiques.)
Otherwise, just love it (otherwise, why do it), nourish it (with learning, knowledge) and let it go. Isn't anyone getting paid around here, that I am aware of leastwise, for what they are tacking up on this site.
Okay, I'm done now. Thanks for stopping by 13.
Uley
24th Feb 2013 10:03am
wow
i was only saying that cuz i liked your work.
i didn't really mean anything by it... :P
i was only saying that cuz i liked your work.
i didn't really mean anything by it... :P
24th Feb 2013 12:21pm
While I perhaps misread something into what you said (primarily as I didn't necessarily agree with your assessment, and suspect that your entry has as much a likelihood of winning as anyone else's--saying so after having read it, I figure your odds may be better)-- I appreciate that you like this, but still, definitely a case of comparing apples and oranges.
You write damn well, and you know it. So quit playin' ;p
Uley
You write damn well, and you know it. So quit playin' ;p
Uley
25th Feb 2013 11:12am
