caught in presence – where else?

knowthyself - the end rhymes suit the pace of this well-written piece! I like the interplay between the light & the dark. Great last stanza! Enjoyed! Welcome to DUP! :)

Carlene

glad you like it!

Interesting - I found this quite sad in its longing. The end was excellent.

thanks for your comment! i agree: it is sad, but hopefully not depressive :)

Yes, our birth may be arbitrary, along with many other things in our lives, but....is fate, too?


Fab lines:
*we are born just right now  
But the fate of birth


Your piece highlights fantastic dilemmas that any philosopher would LOVE to have a piece of cake to.
(And tea, too!)

Beautiful and covert fierceness in its delivery: value the warrens......can count on you to bring food for thought.


Thanks for sharing, know thyself :-)

Please do pen on, poet!

Cheers
Tidespotter

thanks for commenting, tidy :)