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"strict observation allows the artist a bottomless bottle"


not to say that i don't like your work as a whole lb cuz i do but there is always atleast 1 line that truly stands out and blows my hair back.....

well done brotha.........

Many thanks to ya, mr.john of the rot

They sure do! The bottom of a bottle has been my bestie lol ;-)

Loyal as hell, and always willing to listen....that bestie we share...ooooX....o

*smiles*

This is just ...

peaceful to me :)

Bizarre I know, but true non the less. :)

Ha...bizarre maybe..but me too ..thanks maggie

LB,

A nice read man. ..better than nice.


"and she thinks I need help"  It occurred to me, that without the above line the whole poem would've collapsed in unto itself.

I'd probably drop the 'the' outta this line:

"and immunity to the countless bullets"


and  probably change 'slow' to low for some reason that escapes me right now :-)  

anyhow hit the spot as per. good job.

Thanks craic
And i agree, that line is kinda a spine of the thing

And yup, that "the" not needed.
Gona simmer on low, slow....much appreciation my man

I like the flow lightbaron...we can always move it around...

strider

Thanks bro