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Cracked
Paint my world hues of blue
Shades of green
Purple tints
Something beautiful
Something better then this.
Paint me freedom from this cage
Dreams...
Blown glass hazards
never meant for stars to hold
always lost in the atmosphere.
Heavy holdings heres my splintered soul.
I lost my breath when I lost you.
The glass shattered and the cards fell down.
Walls up
I deal better inside myself.
Oceans scream
Skies cry
Is the scars deep enough for you this time?
I bleed you rivers
You return me storms...
And
god damn I hurt when your gone.
My wrist hates your name.
My soul a distorted image
and we really all are cracked souls bleeding light.
Stained glass wishes,
sunshines and shadows
Black
White
No..
these days its all just static
on the tv screen blending.
Too dark for grey
To stable for black
Too lost for white.
Shades of green
Purple tints
Something beautiful
Something better then this.
Paint me freedom from this cage
Dreams...
Blown glass hazards
never meant for stars to hold
always lost in the atmosphere.
Heavy holdings heres my splintered soul.
I lost my breath when I lost you.
The glass shattered and the cards fell down.
Walls up
I deal better inside myself.
Oceans scream
Skies cry
Is the scars deep enough for you this time?
I bleed you rivers
You return me storms...
And
god damn I hurt when your gone.
My wrist hates your name.
My soul a distorted image
and we really all are cracked souls bleeding light.
Stained glass wishes,
sunshines and shadows
Black
White
No..
these days its all just static
on the tv screen blending.
Too dark for grey
To stable for black
Too lost for white.
Published 17th Feb 2013
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17th Feb 2013 1:36am
17th Feb 2013 1:58am
17th Feb 2013 2:29am
I really like the raw honesty of this poem which teems with sharp lines such as "
I lost my breath when I lost you." and " we really all are cracked souls bleeding light.
Stained glass wishes,
sunshines and shadows."
Two nit pickin' typos, "Is the scar deep enough" instead of scars or "Are the scars deep enough" instead of is.
And second to last line "Too stable" instead of to
But over all a very good job!
I lost my breath when I lost you." and " we really all are cracked souls bleeding light.
Stained glass wishes,
sunshines and shadows."
Two nit pickin' typos, "Is the scar deep enough" instead of scars or "Are the scars deep enough" instead of is.
And second to last line "Too stable" instead of to
But over all a very good job!
Anonymous
17th Feb 2013 2:31am
Yep...I'm a bit cracked too River Lily.
Nice heartfelt write...Strider.
Nice heartfelt write...Strider.
Anonymous
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17th Feb 2013 6:39am
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19th Feb 2013 12:52pm
Delightful array of terminology. No contriving or strain to paint this view of clarity.
