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YOU GIVE TOO ME
If heaven is anything like the loving you give too me freely and unconditional, then like the Jefferson's we're moving on up. Letting sexy you set the pace pleases me like cold peaches and warm cream, as it's poured slowly over your gorgeous body. Aroused already stiff nipples changes your sweet thoughts from outside life, to intimate lust for the moment. The sexy looks from those beautiful eyes stiffin me as they sparkle like diamonds with a glance. I truly adore our vibe when we communicate and I just love it when you talk too me. I enjoy watching you speak your mind and making music with your mouth, playing my flute. Sexy lips sooo pretty, both sets. Voice, sweet and soothing too my ear. Our kisses grow with wilder passion as you wrap your delicious body around me enticing me with both sets of hungry lips. I lay you back and your thick pretty thighs spread before me, Simon didn't have to say. I couldn't resist one, three or thirty-five licks too you sweet honey. Drinking your excitement through my tongue and sucking lips, gets a rise out of me as much as you feel it. Freely and unconditionally is the sweetest loving, sexy you give too me...
Sir Lancelott
Sir Lancelott
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5th Feb 2013 2:49pm
Hey Sexy Writer! I love how the male character in this poem is so appreciative of his Boo! He becomes enticed by a simple look or the sound of her voice. For him it's more than a sex thing!
In my opinion anyway! lol
Another orgasmic pen job!
In my opinion anyway! lol
Another orgasmic pen job!
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5th Feb 2013 3:34pm
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5th Feb 2013 5:14pm
I'm pleased sweets
You've got a sexy lil PEN yourself!!!
Thanxxx so much!!
You've got a sexy lil PEN yourself!!!
Thanxxx so much!!
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5th Feb 2013 6:18pm
Sir Lancelott,
You promised thrills, and once again, you have delivered. Enjoyed this much! Love this..."Drinking your excitement through my tongue and sucking lips, gets a rise out of me as much as you feel it. Freely and unconditionally is the sweetest loving, sexy you give too me..."
Really hot stuff...Olga
You promised thrills, and once again, you have delivered. Enjoyed this much! Love this..."Drinking your excitement through my tongue and sucking lips, gets a rise out of me as much as you feel it. Freely and unconditionally is the sweetest loving, sexy you give too me..."
Really hot stuff...Olga
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5th Feb 2013 8:55pm
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6th Feb 2013 5:28am
Yummmmmmy!!!! Visual + my current happenings = checking for leakage.
Good stuff, love! Xoxo
Good stuff, love! Xoxo
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8th Feb 2013 9:33am
omg ...this is hot....loved it....a grand write indeedy...:) thanks synth1
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8th Feb 2013 2:23pm
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Anonymous
- Edited 9th Feb 2013 5:02am
9th Feb 2013 4:57am
Yes, Sir Lancelott.....
I like it a lot!
It IS rather hot,
Is it not? :-D
Could do with paragraphs or verse breaks, whatever....to render flow of reading a tad easier on the eye....
Just a thought now, ok.
Keep all up and pen them peaches and cream ON....!
Cheers
Tidespotter
Ps. It did say...honest critique, so may I?
Title has a typo in it, maybe....YOU GIVE TOO ME.
Suggest.....you give TO me.
Just saying, ok :-)
I like it a lot!
It IS rather hot,
Is it not? :-D
Could do with paragraphs or verse breaks, whatever....to render flow of reading a tad easier on the eye....
Just a thought now, ok.
Keep all up and pen them peaches and cream ON....!
Cheers
Tidespotter
Ps. It did say...honest critique, so may I?
Title has a typo in it, maybe....YOU GIVE TOO ME.
Suggest.....you give TO me.
Just saying, ok :-)
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9th Feb 2013 8:55am
Thanks Tide and much respect!!
I choose "too" me because it's too me, not to me..
Still trying to get my spacing down, but I gotta write it down before I loose my train of thought...
Pen on!!!!!
I choose "too" me because it's too me, not to me..
Still trying to get my spacing down, but I gotta write it down before I loose my train of thought...
Pen on!!!!!
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Anonymous
9th Feb 2013 11:21am
Cool, man.
Dig your response, thanks ;-)
Peace and do pen on, ok!
Tidespotter
Dig your response, thanks ;-)
Peace and do pen on, ok!
Tidespotter
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Anonymous
9th Feb 2013 6:52pm
Thankee, me mate!
Gracias, danke, merci....etc.....
Plus ink!
Tides
Gracias, danke, merci....etc.....
Plus ink!
Tides
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10th Feb 2013 00:52am
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9th Feb 2013 4:45pm
Very sexy writing!
The last line is my favorite:
Freely and unconditionally is the sweetest loving, sexy you give too me...
Mmmmmm....
The last line is my favorite:
Freely and unconditionally is the sweetest loving, sexy you give too me...
Mmmmmm....
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9th Feb 2013 4:59pm
Thanxx sweets for stopping by....
That warms my heart, I appreciate you..
Feel free too read more
That warms my heart, I appreciate you..
Feel free too read more
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23rd Feb 2013 7:02pm
Simon says you must keep doing what you do. Good job on this one brother. Peace always.
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