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Just one night
Sitting by the railroad tracks,
watching the trains,slowly, move away(its a game)
all the miles and all the whiles
I wonder, just what we gained
Just one night I stayed ,just one night,I played
Just one night I stayed, just one night,I played
It's been a long time coming
This change come over me
It's been a long time coming
I guess its up to me
Standing back,watching the veil fall away
revealing things you just could not say(it's a game)
I remember the look on your face
when I walked away( what a shame)
there were tears for sure
but were they real, it's hard to say
Just one night I stayed ,Just one night,I played
Just one night I strayed,Just one night,I played
It's been a long time coming
this change come over me
It's been a long time coming
I guess its all up to me
watching the trains,slowly, move away(its a game)
all the miles and all the whiles
I wonder, just what we gained
Just one night I stayed ,just one night,I played
Just one night I stayed, just one night,I played
It's been a long time coming
This change come over me
It's been a long time coming
I guess its up to me
Standing back,watching the veil fall away
revealing things you just could not say(it's a game)
I remember the look on your face
when I walked away( what a shame)
there were tears for sure
but were they real, it's hard to say
Just one night I stayed ,Just one night,I played
Just one night I strayed,Just one night,I played
It's been a long time coming
this change come over me
It's been a long time coming
I guess its all up to me
Published 24th Jan 2013
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24th Jan 2013 3:15am
24th Jan 2013 3:19am
Thanks LaraD, I am having a great and creative beginning to this year.. I am glad that you get what I am laying down.. One never really knows until you throw it out there for all to see.. Cheers!! S.
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- Edited 24th Jan 2013 4:16pm
24th Jan 2013 4:15pm
Yeah, creative.
For sure.
This one has great flow, especially like in the third line:
*all the miles and all the whiles
Would so love to hear it somehow.
Sounds bluesy....
Pen yer songs, Scopow...u have the power..... :-)
Tidespotter
Ps. Some if your "its" .....kinda need apostrophes, maybe...?
Just an observation, ok.
For sure.
This one has great flow, especially like in the third line:
*all the miles and all the whiles
Would so love to hear it somehow.
Sounds bluesy....
Pen yer songs, Scopow...u have the power..... :-)
Tidespotter
Ps. Some if your "its" .....kinda need apostrophes, maybe...?
Just an observation, ok.
25th Jan 2013 1:30am
Ha ha T, yes my grammar sucks sometimes for sure.. I chuckle a bit because your notes remind me of what my English teacher used to say to me.. In a good way, I truly do thank you for your encouraging notes and friendly jabs about my grammar.I am going into the studio this Sunday to record Take a walk with me, Just one night and Thank you. I must admit that I am puzzled by the fact that you couldn't listen to faded away, I had sent the same thing to a friend in Texas and she got it. I will figure out a way to get you a few songs, I have some of my music on reverbnation look for perfect water band there is a full band recording of faded away there but the timing is a bit off.Cheers T, Have a great day.. S.
