The Atheist

god is near anyone who feels the need to believe in him.

Thank you opheliac for reading and commenting on this one. Keep reading me.

Jack says "i don't believe with your logic", that he doesn't believe in god. whether anyone believes in a god or not is irrelevant to the poem. as it's also irrelevant whether or not you believe in god. though you wrote the poem we can never know if the poem is you, even though you write a footnote which for me spoils the poem. i actually think this is one of the best poems I've read on the site. i have to be honest and say on a few occasions i've read your poetry and passed it over ( i didn't enjoy it enough to hurt your feelings with hash or honest feedback) but this is something else. the english language is a little off kilter but even so i can still enjoy it, that in itself is a feat to achieve. my one other sticking point beside the end note was; Blessing excreta’s down my tees! what do you mean by tees? i found the last verse fresh and alive. it could do with a little edit here and there but too much and the whole essence of the poem would for me be spoiled. my fave line is; stopped singing hymns on fire. thanks for the read. it's on my faves

Isn't the first part of your comment commenting on my feedback, Billy, something which you profess to despise... :P

I don't agree with your logic. I simply don't believe in God, and have no desire to chant for him, and think that theistic religions are false. However, that said, I can still appreciate this poem, for it's sweet images, evocative scenes and rich emotion. This is a very good poem.

Individually, I don't believe in any particular religion, but then I cannot defy the super-power. However, in the context, my character who is an atheist like you is proclaiming the same logic as yours. It is the story of a man who finds no peace after trying so many religions. Thank you for your honest comments and for reading and appreciating this one.

Thanks a lot for your synopsis and I am glad that you have been truly honest. I don't have words to show my emotions when you have said that it is one of the best works in my site. There is nothing more for an artist to achieve after getting such a title. As for the language, I won't defend myself overhere, because I have taken a poet's liberty and you can enjoy a reader's choice. I will also like to welcome you to edit ma work as a sample so that I can thoroughly understand the requirement of an international reader and can affluence my further works to contain the flavor of the same so that my readers won't pass over my efforts without their comments because of a language kilter. I will thoroughly appreciate that if you can do that effort for me. I think it can be a new experiment for the site also and we can together create and highlight the same in a forum. As for the explanation, tees is my T-SHIRT, and it is a common site in a mosque where there are lot of pigeons and they irritate me with such a behavior of theirs, I have simply used it as a metaphor. Thank you so much for adding the same to your fav. Keep reading me and I hope that I will raise my standards in my coming works after such a valuable comment of yours.

good job i enjoyed

for your kind words. Keep reading me:-)