Bad Girls

Ok.  If you're ok with this...and again, really, I'm just trying to help, if you want...I think the fourth line of the first stanza could be shorter.  It doesn't have a good flow with the first three lines, and as you're talking about "washing away" in that stanza, I think it should flow a little better together.  The seventh stanza is a little...well...weak--"redirected"--the first two lines are great, but the last two of the stanza are weak..."redirected" is just a little too...well...sanitized, like, getting "redirected" during a phone call or something...and for what you're talking about, it's a little to sanitary, to indirect, too weak.  The second last stanza seems to just be a sort of filler, or the last line of it does, anyway--maybe it can't be changed, but it just seems to be there solely for the sake of rhyming to me.  Um...in the last line of the last stanza--you really don't need that comma.  It wouldn't be used in common English that way, and there are other ways to achieve the pause that you want there, like putting an extra bit of spacing, maybe a tab key worth or so, or maybe putting the text after the comma on another line entirely--it's an interesting thing you're saying there by the way, but I think it could be more powerful--yes of course bad girls do live, like everyone else, and maybe even more so--maybe it's harder for them than for others?--so I guess I'm saying the first line of the last stanza is somewhat...unnecessary except for it's relation to the last two lines, and maybe it could use a comma at the end of it.

Anyway, powerful piece--maybe the "he" in the third stanza could use a little more background as a character, but anyway...very good...I'm not particularly partial to rhyme, but I'm certainly not against it either.