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PBJ
I miss you more, when I don't hear from you.
Your still here after I broke your Heart..
And you say you still love me
So this is how I know you're the one for me
But do you realize that?
My Pretty Black
I want to welcome you back,
Too this love.
The times when you would message me just because.
Looking forward to my pings in your inbox
Staring at the walls watching the clock's
Waiting on that 1900 to hit
Because you know, you're going to see me
Sharing eachother under these stars
But somehow we still going opposite ways
On this oneway street of love
I don't know what else to say
But I know, I just want my PBJ
Your still here after I broke your Heart..
And you say you still love me
So this is how I know you're the one for me
But do you realize that?
My Pretty Black
I want to welcome you back,
Too this love.
The times when you would message me just because.
Looking forward to my pings in your inbox
Staring at the walls watching the clock's
Waiting on that 1900 to hit
Because you know, you're going to see me
Sharing eachother under these stars
But somehow we still going opposite ways
On this oneway street of love
I don't know what else to say
But I know, I just want my PBJ
Published 11th Jan 2013
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Anonymous
11th Jan 2013 10:10pm
A cool write, poetic soldier.
My fave line:
*Sharing each other under these stars
Tiny observation, if I may....
*Your still here after I broke your Heart..
(maybe ought to be... "You're still...."?)
*Too this love.
( and..." To this...")
And what's PBJ?
Theme is very realistically portrayed.
Swell effort!
Keep penning, C I W.
Cheers
Tidespotter
My fave line:
*Sharing each other under these stars
Tiny observation, if I may....
*Your still here after I broke your Heart..
(maybe ought to be... "You're still...."?)
*Too this love.
( and..." To this...")
And what's PBJ?
Theme is very realistically portrayed.
Swell effort!
Keep penning, C I W.
Cheers
Tidespotter
12th Jan 2013 2:01pm
I didn't realize those until you said something. I write as I go. So it's normally quick But thank you! and PBJ mean Pretty Black Jiggle
Anonymous
12th Jan 2013 2:18pm
Cool, C I W.
Hope not offended. Write did say encourage honest critique.
Thanks for spelling out the abbrevi8n. :-)
But what means that, pretty black jiggle?
Swirl on happy..... more poems.
Cheers
Tidespotter
Hope not offended. Write did say encourage honest critique.
Thanks for spelling out the abbrevi8n. :-)
But what means that, pretty black jiggle?
Swirl on happy..... more poems.
Cheers
Tidespotter
12th Jan 2013 2:43pm
Prettyy black jiggle is a nickname for the person that the poem is about! Also I am not offended at all I look forward to comments. To see what others think! I want to better my skills so I need it!
Anonymous
12th Jan 2013 5:55pm
Cool.
Glad not offended.
Mind thus open to life....
Pen on!
Tidespotter
Glad not offended.
Mind thus open to life....
Pen on!
Tidespotter
