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Holding on
i lay here with my arms across my eyes as the tears run down my cheek, empty handed as ive searched for the answer that i thought would make my life complete. i dont understand why do you try to hurt me so bad, all i ever wanted was for you to.love me instead i watch others have what i never had. A mother's love can comfort or guide you, if taken away it could damage or define you. many say to me release yourself from all this heavy weight, she will never change, yet i still hold on hoping one day itll be worth the wait.
Published 22nd Dec 2012
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22nd Dec 2012 7:10am
This says what you're saying well enough. If I may point out a couple minor things--in the second line, in "all i ever wanted was for you to. love me"--that period after "to" should probably go after "me." Just a little typo, probably. And at the end, though it makes it more clear the person you are talking about, you also make it look like they're saying to you "she will never change," while at the same time you're the one they're talking about when they say that to you.
