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Why mom?
Why mom,
Did you give life to me?
Was i on accident?
Maybe you should of got an abortion when you had the chance?!
Why mom,
I have to go through this mess.?
Was i born for you to have unreasonable control over me?
Am i a slave to you?
You seem like another individual to me?
You say that you love me and yet i dont feel the same.
Some days i just hate you with a passion.
Why im like this you say,
Every day is like hell with you..
I should of stayed with my grandmother
When the social services took me away..
I dont even know you at times
You dont even know me
You say we have a great relationship.
But why do i run to my blade
instead of you?
Why mom you make me despise you?
Why?
Did you give life to me?
Was i on accident?
Maybe you should of got an abortion when you had the chance?!
Why mom,
I have to go through this mess.?
Was i born for you to have unreasonable control over me?
Am i a slave to you?
You seem like another individual to me?
You say that you love me and yet i dont feel the same.
Some days i just hate you with a passion.
Why im like this you say,
Every day is like hell with you..
I should of stayed with my grandmother
When the social services took me away..
I dont even know you at times
You dont even know me
You say we have a great relationship.
But why do i run to my blade
instead of you?
Why mom you make me despise you?
Why?
Published 18th Jul 2010
| Edited 19th Jul 2010
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18th Jul 2010 2:32am
but a beautiful piece of art, and it must of hurt to write this.
keep writing, its a good soul cleanser :)
take care
x Inky Baby x
x.DementedDamsel.x
keep writing, its a good soul cleanser :)
take care
x Inky Baby x
x.DementedDamsel.x
18th Jul 2010 4:31pm
18th Jul 2010 6:38am
it takes a difficult childhood (I am not inferring that you are a child) to know how not to treat your own kids later. The last lines especially, tell me that you have a huge heart, and don't want to despise your mum. Of course I am speaking generically and shouldn't assume that this poem is about the author (you).
On a more Critique note: Watch your grammer and Capitals as (unless intentional) they really do make a huge difference to the read. On the whole however...A powerful honest piece.
On a more Critique note: Watch your grammer and Capitals as (unless intentional) they really do make a huge difference to the read. On the whole however...A powerful honest piece.
18th Jul 2010 4:29pm
thanks for liking it..and yes its about me...also i appreciate the critique note u left..i need that lol..
19th Jul 2010 00:35am
19th Jul 2010 1:07pm
Another poet reflecting her personal feelings on work...however, try poetry, when you are doing that...I know that I m no-one to preach you, however, an artist is meant for creation, not for destruction...the destruction of a so precious life...so what if it is ur life...you are still no one to do so...try poetry when u are destined to do that...and I bet you, u will love even ur life...stop despising...I am ignoring this work of urs as a personal diary entry of yours.
