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'Twas under the rainbow, we first met.
I was young.
You were older.
By
One
Day.
It started out cloudy.
The weather.
Your mood.
And our relationship.
I was laughing.
You were crying.
He'd left you.
And it was starting to rain.
I offered my umbrella.
You were angry that I had laughed.
And walked on, as the rain started to fall.
Gently at first.
As was my apology.
I held it over your head.
You glared and said, "Why?"
That I'd laughed?
Or that he'd left?
The answer was nearly the same.
You view the world, thorough pink tinted glasses.
To you the world was a fiesta of love shaded in pink.
He couldn't stand your pink view of the world.
Your pink definition of love.
As the rain tamed, the sun emerged, a rainbow framed the sky.
And your tears dried.
I saw the gentleness, the softness.
behind the pinkness, that drove him away.
And my laughter was at his loss.
At you, I would never laugh.
With you, I hoped to share many laughs.
And hugs.
And kisses,
And silent glances.
And intimate moments.
And life.
It was your view of the world,
though pink tinted glasses
that drew me to you.
You came to call me your "younger" man.
And I called you my "ol' lady" in turn.
So, dearest,
That's how it began,
under a rainbow filled sky.
You were older.
By
One
Day.
It started out cloudy.
The weather.
Your mood.
And our relationship.
I was laughing.
You were crying.
He'd left you.
And it was starting to rain.
I offered my umbrella.
You were angry that I had laughed.
And walked on, as the rain started to fall.
Gently at first.
As was my apology.
I held it over your head.
You glared and said, "Why?"
That I'd laughed?
Or that he'd left?
The answer was nearly the same.
You view the world, thorough pink tinted glasses.
To you the world was a fiesta of love shaded in pink.
He couldn't stand your pink view of the world.
Your pink definition of love.
As the rain tamed, the sun emerged, a rainbow framed the sky.
And your tears dried.
I saw the gentleness, the softness.
behind the pinkness, that drove him away.
And my laughter was at his loss.
At you, I would never laugh.
With you, I hoped to share many laughs.
And hugs.
And kisses,
And silent glances.
And intimate moments.
And life.
It was your view of the world,
though pink tinted glasses
that drew me to you.
You came to call me your "younger" man.
And I called you my "ol' lady" in turn.
So, dearest,
That's how it began,
under a rainbow filled sky.
Written by
J_J_Jay_Jr
Published 11th Dec 2012
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Re: 'Twas under the rainbow, we first met.
12th Dec 2012 8:28am
re: Re: 'Twas under the rainbow, we first met.
14th Dec 2012 8:20pm
I don't know how to respond to your comment other than to simply acknowledge that you made it and thank you for both reading and commenting.
Re: 'Twas under the rainbow, we first met.
21st Dec 2012 7:37pm
re: Re: 'Twas under the rainbow, we first met.
8th Jan 2013 7:44pm
Magdalena --Thank you for stopping by and not only reading but leaving a comment. I very much appreciate your thoughts as you are one of the poets I most regularly read and respect on dup. Jay
Re: 'Twas under the rainbow, we first met.
29th Dec 2012 6:45pm
re: Re: 'Twas under the rainbow, we first met.
8th Jan 2013 7:47pm
Angel --Thank you for not only reading my work but taking the time to comment. I'm happy that you liked this poem and hope that you find others that you also like --mine and the work of others.
Re: 'Twas under the rainbow, we first met.
Anonymous
8th Jan 2013 11:40am
Cool poem, again.
A lovely, gentle energy.
Have a query, though.
Does it really have that soft and loving ending,
considering she sees the world thru pink-glasses?
References constantly made, so maybe another pink, too..?
Swirl on, J3.
Tidespotter
A lovely, gentle energy.
Have a query, though.
Does it really have that soft and loving ending,
considering she sees the world thru pink-glasses?
References constantly made, so maybe another pink, too..?
Swirl on, J3.
Tidespotter
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re: Re: 'Twas under the rainbow, we first met.
8th Jan 2013 7:49pm
Maybe. I thought about including a few words about her acceptance of him (love for him) but couldn't make the idea really fit so published it as it is.
Again, I appreciate not only that you take the time to read but also take the time to comment and make suggestions. I value that sort of feedback.
Again, I appreciate not only that you take the time to read but also take the time to comment and make suggestions. I value that sort of feedback.
re: re: Re: 'Twas under the rainbow, we first met.
Anonymous
8th Jan 2013 8:02pm
Maybe? It is your poem, after all.
Oh wait, I get it. You want to leave it open-ended. That it?
But nothing needs to FIT.
I was just curious again.....
It's only a pleasure to respond to poetic energy hardly seen by the light of day...given the rough tumble of instant gratifix culture we live in today, you know.
The written word lives not because we write, but because another reads it and shows genuine interest in the sweated efforts of fellow-poets.
Not so?
Anyway, your swell efforts are noted.
Ride on, JJJ.....
Tidespotter
Oh wait, I get it. You want to leave it open-ended. That it?
But nothing needs to FIT.
I was just curious again.....
It's only a pleasure to respond to poetic energy hardly seen by the light of day...given the rough tumble of instant gratifix culture we live in today, you know.
The written word lives not because we write, but because another reads it and shows genuine interest in the sweated efforts of fellow-poets.
Not so?
Anyway, your swell efforts are noted.
Ride on, JJJ.....
Tidespotter
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9th Jan 2013 4:29pm
Thank you. I shall. Maybe a new publication later today? It depends on the amount of time I can steal away to do what I really love, writing.
Re: 'Twas under the rainbow, we first met.
11th Jan 2013 2:53pm
re: Re: 'Twas under the rainbow, we first met.
11th Jan 2013 2:57pm
Thank you! I don't think anyone has ever called a poem of mine beautiful. It truly does warm the heart. And --Wow (thank you) back at you.
Re. 'Twas under the rainbow, we first met.
1st Jun 2017 5:09am
the first stanza, about age, feels a bit out-of-place or early. I like the conflict-resolution structure of this story-like piece.
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Re: Re. 'Twas under the rainbow, we first met.
1st Jun 2017 8:22pm
I like your suggestion. I will think about a rewrite of how this poem begins.
Re. 'Twas under the rainbow, we first met.
26th Nov 2017 10:46pm
i felt this could've been more concise. i like the relation between the exposition and the story.
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14th Sep 2018 8:18pm
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4th Oct 2018 9:48pm