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exit wound
how many 3rd eyes
to see through our plan?
(don't stop us)
(we'll leave by any means)
how many pills
to make an exit door?
leave through the top of our skulls
there was no cut
just some dried blood
like the monk annointed by death
it was a sign
that he had made it
to wherever we go
I'll take us there
fear nothing
because they fear me
and they won't stop us
I say when it's my time to go
our time
do you trust me?
I know you do
(hold the knife steady)
to see through our plan?
(don't stop us)
(we'll leave by any means)
how many pills
to make an exit door?
leave through the top of our skulls
there was no cut
just some dried blood
like the monk annointed by death
it was a sign
that he had made it
to wherever we go
I'll take us there
fear nothing
because they fear me
and they won't stop us
I say when it's my time to go
our time
do you trust me?
I know you do
(hold the knife steady)
Published 10th Jul 2010
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Anonymous
11th Jul 2010 1:21am
As usual, the final, devastating image, through its sheer simplicity and yet poetic violence, startles, and the poem as a whole is victorious in its sense of transcendence, the way it depicts death as a rising up through the top of your skull, a journey to a better place. Bloody beautiful haha.
11th Jul 2010 1:26am
i was telling laura about this video i saw of buddhist monks doing a death ritual with the body after a monk companion of theirs died and a spot of blood showed up on the top of his head (where the crown chakra is in buddhist philosophy which is the connection to the spirit world) and he had already been dead a while so they took that as a good sign.. also when i tried to kill myself there was a spot of dried blood on the top of my head that the doctors said was there but had no knife cut.. i dont remember if i put it there i must have.. part of the ritual.. but theres some more about the poem.. glad you liked it :D
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11th Jul 2010 6:35am
i aim to haunt.. or disturb.. or sicken.. sometimes all three lol.. but you are right its not all darkness there is the bud of a flower coming up between the hardened brick of its foundation.. glad you like it :D
11th Jul 2010 11:03am
11th Jul 2010 7:15pm
11th Jul 2010 12:21pm
I like that idea of an exit door at the top of your skull...like an escape route..and it's not at all like they describe dying; like everything ending and rotting, it's more like life breating out from a prison, being born from something heavy and wasting, and returning to where it's meant to be, like home.
<3
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11th Jul 2010 7:17pm
i love that word "home" it evokes a lot of emotion and imagery in me.. I've seen home.. I've been to the edge.. when we escape through our skulls we'll rise like a double helix together.. entwined in spirit.. that's an image i get anyway :)
11th Jul 2010 9:45pm
I agree with Jack,
wow.
THe imagery is so fucking vivid that it almost shakes me.
wow. thats all i can say :) ~ this is one of my favorites of yours x
wow.
THe imagery is so fucking vivid that it almost shakes me.
wow. thats all i can say :) ~ this is one of my favorites of yours x
11th Jul 2010 10:00pm
im glad i could shake you.. who would have thought strange symbols on a screen could communicate and evoke such emotion if just place in the right way hmmm
