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Rainbow
you are red like fire
orange like the sunset
yellow like hate
green like nature
blue like the sky
as inocent pink
eternity's purple
without you
i am a blank piece of paper
waiting to be filled
orange like the sunset
yellow like hate
green like nature
blue like the sky
as inocent pink
eternity's purple
without you
i am a blank piece of paper
waiting to be filled
Published 7th Dec 2012
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7th Dec 2012 10:38pm
I love this idea but i think it can be so much better... I would love some help with this one :)
Anonymous
7th Dec 2012 10:55pm
VERY NICELY WRITTEN, a joy to read!
You have the skill to write an image.
Thing is, its a bit short, my advice would be to make the poem a bit longer...
You have the skill to write an image.
Thing is, its a bit short, my advice would be to make the poem a bit longer...
7th Dec 2012 11:00pm
Well i have a talent to make essays longer :P But when it comes to poetry i focus on the meaning of words and if they can express what i want to say :) I still think there is something wrong with the colours assosiations... I feel like i can improve it much more... It was written a while back and i posted to get some feedback..
21st Dec 2012 1:24am
I sense a colorful piece of paper, to be decorated later. I quite enjoyed your poem.
21st Dec 2012 11:19pm
