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inevitability
I am the meaning
I am the moon
without me none of you would be here
if I could just make it through the fucking sternum
or just a bit more to the right this time
fuck you
none of you would exist
and I'd have no heart to care
I'll stab them both
I'll take you all down with me
the crash and burn would be only 3 instants
count down begins when I line up the knife
it has to be a stronger blade this time
we live we learn
I am the moon
without me none of you would be here
if I could just make it through the fucking sternum
or just a bit more to the right this time
fuck you
none of you would exist
and I'd have no heart to care
I'll stab them both
I'll take you all down with me
the crash and burn would be only 3 instants
count down begins when I line up the knife
it has to be a stronger blade this time
we live we learn
Published 1st Jul 2010
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Anonymous
1st Jul 2010 4:37pm
Another dark and chilling suicide poem, rich with madness and horror. The way you try and understand your suicidal thoughts through verse reminds me of Plath and Sexton (though you're much more sweary and extreme, of course!).
1st Jul 2010 5:58pm
well thank you for comparing me at least in part to plath and sexton.. yeah i know i swear a lot.. but its expected by now.. nothing shocking about that to you guys.. and of course i do love to go over the edge.. extreme is what i strive for.. cheers
1st Jul 2010 8:09pm
the beginning of the poem and how it develops until the end has a variety of feelings which is what i like about your poems. your poems are like written thoughts with the characteristic of sequence, one thought leads to the other
2nd Jul 2010 2:34am
1st Jul 2010 10:12pm
Those first two likes with their mmm sounds almost lull you into a gentle hum, and then you just pull the carpet from under everybody's feet with the big crashing dark lines that follow. There's such a brilliantly harsh determined tone to this one.
2nd Jul 2010 2:37am
i am to surprise some say i still do even though they've read all my past shit.. they say i still pull the rug from under their feet which makes me happy
