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Autumn
It is November
quaking darkness is surrounding
Friends are s p a r s e as the leaves
the people are crammingtogether to replace the empty spaces
the sun is
f
a
l
l
i
n
g
the trees are bare
and I am done.
quaking darkness is surrounding
Friends are s p a r s e as the leaves
the people are crammingtogether to replace the empty spaces
the sun is
f
a
l
l
i
n
g
the trees are bare
and I am done.
Published 25th Nov 2012
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25th Nov 2012 8:48pm
I love concrete work.....the placement of the letters and words messes with the meanings....yum.
26th Nov 2012 2:34am
I don't do much concrete work but you're right, it can add a whole new layer of meaning. Cheers :)
2nd Dec 2012 1:32pm
Also you can embed other poems by using graphic techniques that group words into concrete images or contexts...for example...
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/76590-butterfly/
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/76590-butterfly/
26th Nov 2012 1:23am
26th Nov 2012 2:34am
17th Dec 2012 2:29am
sublime
i will keep this short.:]
you hate autumn. and you write
about it. objectivity makes it
different.
love the sparseness, the minimalism.
it feels like a deserted hut in remote
sumatra, made of bamboo. with no windows.
it feels desolate.
darkness in bold was gold. envy.
love the form you have displayed in
the next few lines.
even without all of it, this will
still pack a punch. a vicious little
bugger this is.
loved this. keep at it.:]
lovelight,
sumeet
i will keep this short.:]
you hate autumn. and you write
about it. objectivity makes it
different.
love the sparseness, the minimalism.
it feels like a deserted hut in remote
sumatra, made of bamboo. with no windows.
it feels desolate.
darkness in bold was gold. envy.
love the form you have displayed in
the next few lines.
even without all of it, this will
still pack a punch. a vicious little
bugger this is.
loved this. keep at it.:]
lovelight,
sumeet
20th Dec 2012 1:34am
You will keep it short, yet you have the longest comment :)
I'll admit I was excited to see a comment from you, Sumeet.
Although I'm rather pissed that your comments are better poetry than my actual wriitng.
Thank you very much for your commentary :)
I'll admit I was excited to see a comment from you, Sumeet.
Although I'm rather pissed that your comments are better poetry than my actual wriitng.
Thank you very much for your commentary :)
