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Secret Languages Bottles Speak
watching others drown themselves
as it seems to be their second job
no life vest needed to keep them a float
just a bottle
nothing is relevant but energy
and that bottle
evil intentions
good deeds
scales
do they matter
not unless they are at the bottom
of a bottle
it gets old being a voyeur of such things
time wastes away along with their body
seeing it first hand
words don't matter
nothing does
except that bottle
the monster is born
with each gulp
inspecting
almost studying
everything I do not want to be
drowning everyday
choking on life
pathetically trying to explain the numbness
slurred mumbo jumbo
making no sense at all
no one understands them,
except that bottle
as it seems to be their second job
no life vest needed to keep them a float
just a bottle
nothing is relevant but energy
and that bottle
evil intentions
good deeds
scales
do they matter
not unless they are at the bottom
of a bottle
it gets old being a voyeur of such things
time wastes away along with their body
seeing it first hand
words don't matter
nothing does
except that bottle
the monster is born
with each gulp
inspecting
almost studying
everything I do not want to be
drowning everyday
choking on life
pathetically trying to explain the numbness
slurred mumbo jumbo
making no sense at all
no one understands them,
except that bottle
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Re: Secret Languages Bottles Speak
24th Nov 2012 2:00am
Nikkie this is excellent!
The image with the pic is perfect as well.
Go girl!
Fire
The image with the pic is perfect as well.
Go girl!
Fire
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24th Nov 2012 2:02am
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24th Nov 2012 2:27am
yeah --- awesome work and accompanying image ---
its almost like regression back to
drooling baby suckin on that bottle,
`cept their aint ANY innocence involved.......
its almost like regression back to
drooling baby suckin on that bottle,
`cept their aint ANY innocence involved.......
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24th Nov 2012 2:29am
Re: Secret Languages Bottles Speak
24th Nov 2012 2:54am
Damn.. I love the bottle. I don't mind that it's the only one who gets me ;)
Brutal poem, hits hard.
Brutal poem, hits hard.
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24th Nov 2012 2:55am
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24th Nov 2012 7:31am
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24th Nov 2012 10:43am
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24th Nov 2012 1:30pm
just signed up to this site...nice one subtle as i like. we depressed souls
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27th Nov 2012 2:15pm
Re: Secret Languages Bottles Speak
24th Nov 2012 3:38pm
Nikki I love your mind it really does some deep thinking...but this poem is just one of them that makes me say...woowww
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27th Nov 2012 2:15pm
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25th Nov 2012 7:33am
I admire so much how you are able to tie images to your writing. The words alone were enough, but the visual... slams it home. Made me look twice at the bottle I commune with this night. Makes me wonder how far I dare to tread before I'm over my head... as I pour another sip.
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re: Re: Secret Languages Bottles Speak
27th Nov 2012 2:17pm
thank you ST!!
get off the sauce!!
I seen a lot of good people drink themselves into wet brain, and early graves your way better than that! love you ST :)
get off the sauce!!
I seen a lot of good people drink themselves into wet brain, and early graves your way better than that! love you ST :)
Re: Secret Languages Bottles Speak
26th Nov 2012 3:03am
I flirt with the monster every night. Some times I win, sometimes I don't, usually a draw. Thanks for the reminder to keep working on winning. Wonderful work. (still loving the "new" style)
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27th Nov 2012 2:22pm
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Anonymous
7th Jan 2013 8:06pm
Felt the energy of numbness hit me as I read this while listening to RadioHead's "No Surprises".
What a combo!
A beautifully written piece.
Thanks for lovely effort, Nikki M.
Keep that goin!
Cheers
Tidespotter
What a combo!
A beautifully written piece.
Thanks for lovely effort, Nikki M.
Keep that goin!
Cheers
Tidespotter
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