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Barely Living
Another birthday goes by
And Daddy still misses you
He deleted all his poems
because they were painful
But now what does he do?
He writes yet another poem for you
Maybe because you're always in my thoughts
Tearing me apart and making me beg
Mercy would have taken me the day you died
Yet,
Unfortunately I'm still here
Alive, but barely living.
And Daddy still misses you
He deleted all his poems
because they were painful
But now what does he do?
He writes yet another poem for you
Maybe because you're always in my thoughts
Tearing me apart and making me beg
Mercy would have taken me the day you died
Yet,
Unfortunately I'm still here
Alive, but barely living.
Published 15th Nov 2012
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Anonymous
15th Nov 2012 10:01am
Your pain and longing really comes across to the reader (well to me) in waves, and it's a powerful.. productive muse and it really shows you have something powerful here.. Poetry wise, writing your pain out in a poem is very powerful and would make an excellent, realistic piece, something that DUP lacks in some areas..
It's up to you though Brandon, I personally would love to see some more poetry from you.. stay strong though.
It's up to you though Brandon, I personally would love to see some more poetry from you.. stay strong though.
15th Nov 2012 10:02am
Anonymous
15th Nov 2012 10:03am
No worries Brandon
15th Nov 2012 12:00pm
I agree, it's strong feelings of pain and hurt. Did the poetry ease things last time? Humbled that you share this.
15th Nov 2012 12:44pm
wowwww really touched. i make poems of this sort more. poetry shouldn't b bout only sex; love, n happy moments... its more beautiful and relieving to put down sad moments we cant forget. its lyk talkin to different people to feel what you feel in agony... thumbs.. beautiful
Anonymous
21st Nov 2012 4:44am
what a touching write, thank you for sharing!
so terribly sorry for your loss!!!
so terribly sorry for your loss!!!
