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Surrender to Lust
Dark hands like steel bands upon seizing thighs
Taste me, as I writhe and moan my lust to the full moon
Teeth scrape gently along a pulsing member
Growl to the stars your unwilling pleasure
Fill me slowly to stoke the raging fire
And watch as I burn from the sweetest desire
Delve deeper still into this silky inferno
I see indesicion on your face your thinking should I stop or should I go
Bodies entwined under the galaxy's canopy
None but the crickets watch them slip and slide
Take me to the ledge where the world has ended
You never stood a chance of leaving this time
The universe laughs yet again
As we fell victim to Fates decree
Neither first nor last to wage this battle
Between lust and passion and flying free
Taste me, as I writhe and moan my lust to the full moon
Teeth scrape gently along a pulsing member
Growl to the stars your unwilling pleasure
Fill me slowly to stoke the raging fire
And watch as I burn from the sweetest desire
Delve deeper still into this silky inferno
I see indesicion on your face your thinking should I stop or should I go
Bodies entwined under the galaxy's canopy
None but the crickets watch them slip and slide
Take me to the ledge where the world has ended
You never stood a chance of leaving this time
The universe laughs yet again
As we fell victim to Fates decree
Neither first nor last to wage this battle
Between lust and passion and flying free
Published 11th Nov 2012
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11th Nov 2012 1:42pm
hi, im kinda new at this but this was really good i like the detail you put into it.:)nice job lol
11th Nov 2012 6:22pm
11th Nov 2012 5:52pm
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Gotta water slide feel to it.. For the most part I liked what you did
w/ your rhyme scheme. Though I thought the 2nd stanza was a bit more forced than the others. But the flow & pace and imagery was on point. Definitely sloppy kisses.
Welcome to the site, write more and thanks for checkin out my scribbles.
k-cool
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Gotta water slide feel to it.. For the most part I liked what you did
w/ your rhyme scheme. Though I thought the 2nd stanza was a bit more forced than the others. But the flow & pace and imagery was on point. Definitely sloppy kisses.
Welcome to the site, write more and thanks for checkin out my scribbles.
k-cool
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.l
11th Nov 2012 6:30pm
Yes! I thought that too because I got distracted and lost it for a bit, then I wasn't sure how to fix it...but thanxx for taking the time to read it, I figured I'd give it a try and see where it got me. :)
~ Mystic ~
~ Mystic ~
12th Nov 2012 8:17am
Taste me, as I writhe and moan my lust to the full moon
Growl to the stars your unwilling pleasure
enjoyed this...i wish i could do one today..but not sure what to do to earn the credits to write...:( also new here
Growl to the stars your unwilling pleasure
enjoyed this...i wish i could do one today..but not sure what to do to earn the credits to write...:( also new here
12th Nov 2012 9:23pm
Hey I'm new here too! When I wrote that first part I saw it a bit differently in my mind...but I like how it turned out tho. Thanxx for taking the time to read my first attempt, oh and btw you just have to comment on poems or forums 3 times in order to post your own work, Good Luck!
