collateral damage

This poem was great

thanks M-D

First off, "throte" should be spelled "throat", the eighth line should say, "lifeless and dead" instead of "lifeless an dead". Again in line fifteen you need "and" instead of "an". I think you rushed a bit through the spelling, but other than that this was a really entertaining, interesting, dark, and vivid poem. I absolutely love the last two lines:

"hurry tomorrow...
fucking today was long.."

that's exactly the way I feel some days and that was a great way to put it.

                    Peace and providence,
                               Loki

wow..
thank you for the abundance of input Loki
and when I get a chance I will edit it
with spelling not being my strongest point
and in my opinion if ya can understand the word
it'll do..

you are very welcome, Boreas

I felt pain and anguish through this write. I love it

was one pretty fucked up day, thanks for the appreciation