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Lie
two words
that cut so deep
"You're beautiful"
Like a knife
to my heart
if the words
rang truth
Then why
does the mirror lie
that cut so deep
"You're beautiful"
Like a knife
to my heart
if the words
rang truth
Then why
does the mirror lie
Published 26th Sep 2012
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26th Sep 2012 6:03am
Hey there flexy.
no slack.ha.
Nice poignant idea, that could be emphasized by breaks, in my opinion.
two words
that cut so deep
"You're beautiful"
Like a knife
to my heart
if the words
rang truth
Then why
does the mirror lie
simple suggestions...obviously just my opinion
no slack.ha.
Nice poignant idea, that could be emphasized by breaks, in my opinion.
two words
that cut so deep
"You're beautiful"
Like a knife
to my heart
if the words
rang truth
Then why
does the mirror lie
simple suggestions...obviously just my opinion
26th Sep 2012 7:42am
Hey thanx for that. I'm just trying this poetry thing out. As a reader I see your take hits in a more powerful way. Thanx again
26th Sep 2012 8:58pm
26th Sep 2012 10:14pm
Well this is certainly right to the chase. Simple yet pleasant. I can hear a little confusion and that's raw honesty. Keep trying it comes along.
