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One breath
How can he sit there with such beauty
Alone in the night
Looking for crack dealers and their whores
Such a man should be here
Touching every inch of my body until I become undone
Instead he sits playing with his gun
I just lay here dreaming of hard thighs and beautiful knowing eyes
Teasing myself until I swear I can
Be with him in his cruiser
Ignoring the sounds coming out of his radio
Danger is right here
Me sitting on top of him naked
Dipping high and low
While he grabs my hair and sucks my neck
feeling his soft cotton lips on mine
With his clenched jaw as he whispers shh over my mouth
Holding my gasp there
As I drip every last drop I have in my body onto him
Alone in the night
Looking for crack dealers and their whores
Such a man should be here
Touching every inch of my body until I become undone
Instead he sits playing with his gun
I just lay here dreaming of hard thighs and beautiful knowing eyes
Teasing myself until I swear I can
Be with him in his cruiser
Ignoring the sounds coming out of his radio
Danger is right here
Me sitting on top of him naked
Dipping high and low
While he grabs my hair and sucks my neck
feeling his soft cotton lips on mine
With his clenched jaw as he whispers shh over my mouth
Holding my gasp there
As I drip every last drop I have in my body onto him
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Re: One breath
Anonymous
6th Sep 2012 10:15pm
This is a very romantic poem. It feels like a tender private fantasy perhaps shared with a diary, or silent thoughts at night. The use of a police officer in this scenario is masterful. I loved the image of him sitting alone in wait for crack dealers and whores, and the car radio going, almost as if it's a soundtrack to the sex. Thanks for the read.
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6th Sep 2012 10:31pm
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6th Sep 2012 10:23pm
WOW, hot and steamy all the while painful and empty to feel such passion for a man that desires crack from dealers and whores above yours... I do hope you just made all that up. God, I hope it's not real, at least the parts about the crack dealers and their whores... I know you have a boyfriend here, please tell me that's not him... JJ
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6th Sep 2012 10:50pm
Haha I don't have a boyfriend here. But I did use someone from here as a muse. But no nothing like that. Thanks for the concern jj. Very sweet
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6th Sep 2012 11:25pm
oh, well I just remember something a couple of months ago where we got into it in one of the forums about something and there was this guy who I thought was your boyfriend who made some remark about me that I can't recall just now, but it was some sort of insult. Or was he just some member jumping in to rabble rouse, as members will do in the forums... jj
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Anonymous
6th Sep 2012 10:37pm
A hot cop and illegal sex in a cruiser. . .Does it get any better than that? Hot write, BFFxoxo
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6th Sep 2012 10:51pm
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6th Sep 2012 11:09pm
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6th Sep 2012 11:44pm
you know how to pick the tiniest gestures that make an entire poem. love this, fishy. no question! x
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Re: One breath
7th Sep 2012 3:04am
Just wanted to say this momma,I want to be a cop or a marine. This just made that all more desirable . I loved it
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7th Sep 2012 3:07am
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Gg this poem just floored me so hot and sexy I hope you get your cop..peace Crim
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Re: One breath
10th Sep 2012 8:46pm
i love the wild feeling in this one GeeGee. Does quite a bit of favor to the imagination.
Cheers!
Cheers!
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10th Sep 2012 8:56pm
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11th Sep 2012 10:35pm
Gigi :)
I agree with Jack, It's wonderfully romantic and dangerously personal. also Jess hit the mark when she talked about bringing the tiniest gestures and amplifying them to resonate like a super woofer.
this is really good, not too graphic and sensual.
nothing to give you here Gigi, sorry.
shine on!
I agree with Jack, It's wonderfully romantic and dangerously personal. also Jess hit the mark when she talked about bringing the tiniest gestures and amplifying them to resonate like a super woofer.
this is really good, not too graphic and sensual.
nothing to give you here Gigi, sorry.
shine on!
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11th Sep 2012 10:37pm
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26th Sep 2012 8:29am
Very passionate and as stated before, almost romantic. There's something so solemn and whistful about this piece.
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Re: One breath
4th Oct 2012 8:49pm
This is great! I had these fantasies about a cop at one time. So I went on a few dates with him and realized that I really did not like him when he wasn't in his uniform patrolling the streets. Sad story for him I guess, LOL. I enjoyed this write.
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4th Oct 2012 8:50pm