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Disordered
My vision is blurred, unable to see
Ringing in my ears, deafening me
Fatigue deep set in every limb
But I know its worth it to become slim
Irrational, impatient, always crying,
Starving, hating, slowly dying
Saw my hipbones appear today
Gives me another reason to carry on this way
Overcome with stomach ache
Hope when I sleep, I won't wake
It so hurts, I scream in pain,
This eating disorder driving me insane.
Ringing in my ears, deafening me
Fatigue deep set in every limb
But I know its worth it to become slim
Irrational, impatient, always crying,
Starving, hating, slowly dying
Saw my hipbones appear today
Gives me another reason to carry on this way
Overcome with stomach ache
Hope when I sleep, I won't wake
It so hurts, I scream in pain,
This eating disorder driving me insane.
Published 27th Aug 2012
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27th Aug 2012 11:21pm
This is really good, great concept:) My only critique would be that some of the rhymes are quite simple and I feel that takes some of the effect away, but it's all personal preference really. A nice poem!
28th Aug 2012 9:15am
Anonymous
1st Jul 2016 2:19am
Hope you sort your life out. It's up to you to do that.
