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Cityscape's Morbidity
The cityscape's morbidity comes into bloom
and I can't forget all the rubbing of scars
and the "there there" I'll fix you with a selfish heart;
I'll miss you when I can't push in you
because even when you frown beneath me
you wriggle and squirm as though your wings
never existed.
We paint God's eyes on our eyelids
close our eyes,
become Aztec gold returned,
slowly unraveled from soft, Spanish cloth.
Life is love and love is flesh going nowhere
because we're convinced that all we need
is wrapped for us in a parcel of skin.
These roads are veins that take our freedom
constantly returning us to the city's heart.
The cityscape's morbidity comes into bloom
and the illusions are growing quicker than concrete.
Published 27th Aug 2012
| Edited 28th Aug 2012
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27th Aug 2012 11:41pm
28th Aug 2012 8:06am
28th Aug 2012 10:58am
Think it works out great how the 'r's in 'unraveled' and 'returned' echo the action of that unrolling. And then how those lines roll out and seem to come to an abrupt halt at 'and love is flesh going nowhere' - I love that line. When I read it, my head wants to somehow separate the 'and' from the 'love' cause then you fall more clearly in that halting way onto that unravelled conclusion. But putting a line break in there wouldn't sit right, I don't think. So I guess I'm going nowhere with that, I'll just stick with: I really like that bit.
I remember being told in a geography lesson years ago that settlements start usually around a water source, and build outwards slowly from there. And so those lines like 'I'll miss you when I can't push in you' (love the mixture of tenderness and force in that one) and 'wrapped for us in a parcel of skin' were really interesting, cause they seem to hint at getting at that core around which everything else came to be built, the way I read it.
I remember being told in a geography lesson years ago that settlements start usually around a water source, and build outwards slowly from there. And so those lines like 'I'll miss you when I can't push in you' (love the mixture of tenderness and force in that one) and 'wrapped for us in a parcel of skin' were really interesting, cause they seem to hint at getting at that core around which everything else came to be built, the way I read it.
29th Aug 2012 8:18am
That was great; the settlement part. I think in modern day it's not water that's important plus we've settled everywhere possible and just become more of a dense population.
Your interpretation is great and I love how you read right into it.
Thank you for your lovely comment, Merda.
Your interpretation is great and I love how you read right into it.
Thank you for your lovely comment, Merda.
