A soul to take.

very disturbing. Is he a rapist? A demon? You leave it to the reader to decide.

1.  As I took her away I cover her eyes as I walk her in to the dark of night.  -  Well, you've got a few tenses to clean up which means, you should probably decide whether the action has happened already or it's happening now. You want "take" not "took" on that line. Try reading your work back to yourself aloud. It can help with the voice. Does it all sound the way you would want to say it to someone or does it sound choppy and unnatural?

My eyes are that of man with lust for her body.
I will leave her soul be hide(?), I will not warm her heart up to my needs for which I will take from her what I need.  

2.  For I force her to floor below use(?) as I rip off what she wears  -  You only need to start a sentence with the word "for" when you're saying why something is happening.

For I need to see the fear in her eyes as I take what I need from her soul .  - Like here. "For" is okay here, even though you could be structuring the sentence in a more engaging way.

Her tears down her face is what I need to feel.

3.  As I work myself deep inside her is where I take what was her soul. -  And try to flow the sentences without overusing the word "as". Is there another way you can tell us what's going on?
As I cover her face I pull myself down deep inside her.

4.  For I control our time for which we share. -  "For which" might mean something other than what you think it means. If you take "for" out of it then "which" could sit there by itself.

Then she calls out to the lord to be.  
But this is where I get to play role of her lord.

5.  For this is love and hate let her pray to the one above?  -  Are you sure this was supposed to be a question?
Will he come down from his cloud to save her soul that I shall take?
It's taken me all this time to find out what I need to know
That I have the power of her lord. Will I let her live or die?

6.  Let it be known, for I will take her soul before I am done  -  The end is very strange. We don't know what is meant to be known at this point because you leave us hanging on the questions. Let what be known?

I hope that shows more of why people aren't connecting to your writing just yet. Keep at it. If you want to read a poet who also struggles with dyslexia, try Gg78. She's learned how to get her ideas across with the odds stacked against her. Good luck.

deepundergroundpoetry.com/poets/Gg78/

One last thing. Technicalities don't make someone a better poet, but they help you get your message to the reader. That's all I'm trying to help with here. No offense meant.

Thanks for your take of what  I  wrote.Thats is 100% what I am looking for.Is to how to make my work better and more readable to the ones that wants to read it.
Thanks you for taking your time and giving me so pointer. I will try to make use of them and better the work that I try to do.