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Home is Lost
Home is lost, faded, gone.
I’m a perpetual guest, polite and alone
Old bonds tighten, secure and strong.
How I’d sought them, forged them,
fiercely shunning uncertainty.
The castle is now a keep,
with no key.
A window looks out to sea,
beckoning and holding
treasures unknown.
I’m a perpetual guest, polite and alone
Old bonds tighten, secure and strong.
How I’d sought them, forged them,
fiercely shunning uncertainty.
The castle is now a keep,
with no key.
A window looks out to sea,
beckoning and holding
treasures unknown.
Published 4th Aug 2012
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5th Aug 2012 3:31am
5th Aug 2012 5:49am
1st Dec 2012 7:59pm
I love how discretely powerful it is.
Wonderful stanza:
Old bonds tighten, secure and strong.
How I’d sought them, forged them,
fiercely shunning uncertainty.
Well written.
Wonderful stanza:
Old bonds tighten, secure and strong.
How I’d sought them, forged them,
fiercely shunning uncertainty.
Well written.
1st Dec 2012 9:37pm
5th Dec 2012 5:08am
I think this is quite simply...damn near perfect. The only thing that stops me as I read this 5 times in a row is this part.
Old bonds tighten, secure and strong.
How I’d sought them, forged them,
fiercely shunning uncertainty.
I love this but I think there could be something else after 'uncertainty'....something that rhymes with 'strong' or ya know...gets close to rhyming enough to kind of complete the verse.
But completely badass just as it is ;)
Old bonds tighten, secure and strong.
How I’d sought them, forged them,
fiercely shunning uncertainty.
I love this but I think there could be something else after 'uncertainty'....something that rhymes with 'strong' or ya know...gets close to rhyming enough to kind of complete the verse.
But completely badass just as it is ;)
5th Dec 2012 6:48am
14th Dec 2012 1:42am
I fell in love with ' A perpetual guest, polite and alone'
You convinced me I can leave my poems short :)
You convinced me I can leave my poems short :)
14th Dec 2012 6:19am
15th Dec 2012 3:49am
