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Confession...
An ignorant trip to my abyss…
the hot and hungry temptation,
was consumed and satisfied with honesty,
it was a modest desire,that was approached by naked satisfaction…
universal sin was contradicted by the need of philosophy-
an event beneath the moon and consequences of fire!
A couple of dogs by the street barked…
some root grasses were gripped sentimentally,
the oomph was no more important than the motive,
one glass of water was breathlessly drunk,
and edged out from the lamp-top accidentally,
my first touch, un-censored and primitive,
was loathed by a victim with its world down-sunk!
[i]What happens when a crime tends to take the shape of a confession?
Is it possible to repair the irreparable?
The confession of the above rapist is titillating and clinching yet unjustified. The dark deeds are wrapped soulfully to moaning but the sound of pains for the victim has made a resonance scattering into small brittle pieces of helplessness that cannot be re-gathered.[/i]
the hot and hungry temptation,
was consumed and satisfied with honesty,
it was a modest desire,that was approached by naked satisfaction…
universal sin was contradicted by the need of philosophy-
an event beneath the moon and consequences of fire!
A couple of dogs by the street barked…
some root grasses were gripped sentimentally,
the oomph was no more important than the motive,
one glass of water was breathlessly drunk,
and edged out from the lamp-top accidentally,
my first touch, un-censored and primitive,
was loathed by a victim with its world down-sunk!
[i]What happens when a crime tends to take the shape of a confession?
Is it possible to repair the irreparable?
The confession of the above rapist is titillating and clinching yet unjustified. The dark deeds are wrapped soulfully to moaning but the sound of pains for the victim has made a resonance scattering into small brittle pieces of helplessness that cannot be re-gathered.[/i]
Published 5th Apr 2010
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Anonymous
7th Apr 2010 11:41pm
the images here roll off the tongue with dark and perfect subtlety, as you depict how the world of the criminal becomes hellish following the commission of his wicked deed, and how he can only achieve happiness once more with the admittance of his guilt. The first two mid sentence commas, as well as both ellipses, were a tad unnecessary, but other than that this is a fantastic, mysterious, compelling poem.
Anonymous
8th Apr 2010 00:32am
and weaves a magic which, as Jack states makes this a mysterious poem.
Steven
Steven
Anonymous
8th Apr 2010 5:17am
and almost sureal, i love the mention of 'the glass edged out on top of the lamp-shade' part, somehow it startles in a strange manner,there is a haunting darkness and and eerie silence about this piece, i really like, as Jack has already mentioned, this is perhaps one of ur very best.
27th Nov 2011 1:13am
