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Fool or Nothing
Wasn't I defiant once? Wasn't I fool enough?
Now my voice whistles quietly into the wind.
Well drive the pins back through my hands
and crown me once again. Just remember
that no God or humane angel
will be collecting this goose-like soul today.
Now my voice whistles quietly into the wind.
Well drive the pins back through my hands
and crown me once again. Just remember
that no God or humane angel
will be collecting this goose-like soul today.
Published 31st Jul 2012
| Edited 1st Aug 2012
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31st Jul 2012 9:55pm
MR A
I like this.There's some substance in it. short but very clear.
I'd probably take the 'a out of the first line but it works either way I think.
maybe a full stop after 'again on the third.
anyway nicely done man.
I like this.There's some substance in it. short but very clear.
I'd probably take the 'a out of the first line but it works either way I think.
maybe a full stop after 'again on the third.
anyway nicely done man.
1st Aug 2012 4:32pm
The 'a' was added later because I didn't want to sound ye olde, but I'll change it. Full stop fits better too.
Thanks for your visit, man.
Thanks for your visit, man.
31st Jul 2012 10:13pm
Hell yeah...dont sense it as anger but empowerment...agree w eamon on the "a" in first line, but fairly inconsequential. Nice
1st Aug 2012 4:35pm
You know how the fuzzy categorising goes, suited here best I think.
Was going to expand it more than a verse, but it stayed how it is.
Thanks for your time, lb.
Was going to expand it more than a verse, but it stayed how it is.
Thanks for your time, lb.
nothin'foolin'round....topnotch
ye has a lovely way wit brevity, briefity, & brevitousness...simutaneously
&rite upon thee wright-on
PS: great gooselike soul
ye has a lovely way wit brevity, briefity, & brevitousness...simutaneously
&rite upon thee wright-on
PS: great gooselike soul
1st Aug 2012 4:37pm
2nd Aug 2012 11:55am
yes---
kind too far ever as, indeed!
[ wh'ere's me
avatar cost'ume ? ]
kind too far ever as, indeed!
[ wh'ere's me
avatar cost'ume ? ]
8th Aug 2012 5:48am
