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Woven Water.
At waters edge
where surf meets sand
waves creep in and
little prancing horses die
after passing by my stance
ripples intertwine and dance
weave their cool aquatic web
then fade away upon the ebb
where surf meets sand
waves creep in and
little prancing horses die
after passing by my stance
ripples intertwine and dance
weave their cool aquatic web
then fade away upon the ebb
Published 31st Mar 2010
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31st Mar 2010 4:27pm
Anonymous
31st Mar 2010 4:49pm
really like your title, this small piece makes a graphic picture of your "little prancing horses":-)
31st Mar 2010 5:54pm
31st Mar 2010 10:55pm
Anonymous
3rd Apr 2010 7:56pm
sprinkled with a fine light dash of darkness. I especially loved the line "little prancing horses die"; the effect was rather like someone telling you that they've just murdered some adorable widdle kittens. The final rhyming of "web" and "ebb" worked well also, as it provided a succinct ending to the piece.
3rd Apr 2010 8:11pm
