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My Ultimate Fantasy
I want to suck you dry of your despair,
Leave you bare in bliss,
with every stroke of my wet clit
against your stiff, rigid dick
Make you soar in euphoric Ecstasy
expended in deep Majesty;
loving my audacity
to have your heart's vivacity
and your soul's tenacity,
to reap your minds philosophy
invading your body's vanity.
Giving you vitality,
Keeping you.. Me.. happy
That is my ultimate fantasy
Published 9th Jul 2012
| Edited 27th Aug 2012
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10th Jul 2012 5:40am
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27th Aug 2012 10:01pm
The rhyme scheme works so nicely! Minor suggestion, you might want to add apostrophes. Now it looks like there are two hearts. (heart's) Same thing with souls. (soul's)
27th Aug 2012 10:46pm
28th Aug 2012 6:06am
You aren't alone! I think that with the shorter length of a poem, people have a tendency to miss errors. In this case they didn't prevent the meaning from coming through, so no biggie.
