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I blame myself
Your death is all my fault.
Your life's been put on hault.
Lying on the ground surrounded in red.
While I'm in the other room sleeping in bed.
Razors surrounding you,knives inside you.
Me sitting there trying to revive you.
Screaming and pleading why oh why?
I blame myself for that terrible night.
Sitting in the front seeing your pale body.
Staring and staring at the lifeless body.
Seeing the wounds all around your neck.
And people wonder why I'm such a wreck.
They all wonder what happened.
And why it had happened.
Watching me crying and crying.
I don't even know why I'm trying.
If only I stayed out with you that night.
I wouldn't have to see this sight.
Why am a such a terrible person.
Couldn't even help you,when your mood worsen.
It's all my fault i swear it's true.
Soon my body will be black and blue.
I'm sorry I did this.
I'm the worst person to ever exist.
Published 4th Jul 2012
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4th Jul 2012 5:43am
4th Jul 2012 5:07pm
Oh..nothing actually when I start thinking about something around suicide and what not I usually start writing it down and this was one of those things.
11th Sep 2012 9:28pm
when your mood *worsened.
Should this really be under Misc. though? Dark is more like it.
The Perception you tried to bring across is good but I think, at the end, where you say "soon my body will be black n blue" couldve been more smooth as in the transition from you talking about the person then to yourself -- i didnt like it . Maybe if you added a space?.
Apart from that it was good.
[rubix]
Should this really be under Misc. though? Dark is more like it.
The Perception you tried to bring across is good but I think, at the end, where you say "soon my body will be black n blue" couldve been more smooth as in the transition from you talking about the person then to yourself -- i didnt like it . Maybe if you added a space?.
Apart from that it was good.
[rubix]
