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You Held The Key.
The brightness in your eyes
dull the sound of my releinquished cries;
And sends them on a ship where
nothing but darkness lies.
The depth of compassion in your voice
sends spirals of joy through my nerves;
and leave me no other choice but to
place my arms around yours.
The warmth and tranquility of your presence
sends every act of joy and love to my very exsistance.
And expells all of my emotions of sadness and fear
To an island where not even the closest escape is near.
The sweep of your soft touch sends sparks to my very core
Causing every memory of darkness to collapse like they never have before;
Creating a mental flow of cold wind that sweeps through my body
carelessly filling me with joy and parody.
The brightness in your eyes tranquils the
raging act of emotions that causes my heart to die.
revealing all the river streams to fall through my disguise
hidden behind my mask of truth, where you unlocked the secret that lies.
Published 24th Jun 2012
| Edited 28th Sep 2016
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25th Jun 2012 9:18pm
carelessly filling me with joy and parody.....like
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The brightness in your eyes
dulls my relinquished cries;
And sends them on a ship where
only darkness lies.
The depth of your compassion
sends joyful spirals through my nerves;
and leaves no other choice
and so I place my arms in yours.
I'm messing with the structure, but there's a background here I don't have in order to completely contain it....
.........................................
The brightness in your eyes
dulls my relinquished cries;
And sends them on a ship where
only darkness lies.
The depth of your compassion
sends joyful spirals through my nerves;
and leaves no other choice
and so I place my arms in yours.
I'm messing with the structure, but there's a background here I don't have in order to completely contain it....
25th Oct 2012 7:20pm
Anonymous
22nd Jan 2013 6:27pm
Love the way you have woven your choice of words into this beautiful tapestry-result!
Cool effort, Z.
Small observations, if I may.
*dull the sound of my releinquished cries
(Spell-check typo needed in second last word, maybe....?)
*And expells all of my emotions of sadness and fear
(Ditto that on the second word in this line)
*sends every act of joy and love to my very exsistance
(Again typo .......last word...?)
*The brightness in your eyes tranquils the....
(Not too sure if "tranquils" is usually used as a verb, but must admit...interesting to see...:-)
Pen on, poet!
Thanks for sharing.
Cheers
Tidespotter
Cool effort, Z.
Small observations, if I may.
*dull the sound of my releinquished cries
(Spell-check typo needed in second last word, maybe....?)
*And expells all of my emotions of sadness and fear
(Ditto that on the second word in this line)
*sends every act of joy and love to my very exsistance
(Again typo .......last word...?)
*The brightness in your eyes tranquils the....
(Not too sure if "tranquils" is usually used as a verb, but must admit...interesting to see...:-)
Pen on, poet!
Thanks for sharing.
Cheers
Tidespotter
