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Hangman's noose
Take the hangman's noose,
and tie it in a knot,
hang it up, up pretty high,
then say you'd rather rot.
You say life is evil,
you say life is mean,
you say life is cruel,
and then you make a scene.
So go back to your noose,
go back to your pain,
go back to your hate,
then let yourself hang.
You're taking it all away,
all the pain, tears, and hate,
putting it above your head,
while you hang there and sway.
and tie it in a knot,
hang it up, up pretty high,
then say you'd rather rot.
You say life is evil,
you say life is mean,
you say life is cruel,
and then you make a scene.
So go back to your noose,
go back to your pain,
go back to your hate,
then let yourself hang.
You're taking it all away,
all the pain, tears, and hate,
putting it above your head,
while you hang there and sway.
Published 13th Jun 2012
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This reads more like a depressing recipe for suicide, than a poem about suicide with the plan to hang, and is limited in it's story telling vision. The back and forth effect of this is a little confusing.
Hanging is also a painful way to die, the person hanging themselves would be lucky to snap their necks on the drop, and even if they did, there is no guarantee of instant death, so they'd sway with a broken neck and asphyxiate.
Why does the person want to commit suicide? Why do they feel that life is cruel? etc
The idea is good, but this poem has no depth.
A good poem tells a story or captures a moment.
Sorry if this is a little harsh. I wouldn't comment if I didn't see the potential.
Peace, Indie
Hanging is also a painful way to die, the person hanging themselves would be lucky to snap their necks on the drop, and even if they did, there is no guarantee of instant death, so they'd sway with a broken neck and asphyxiate.
Why does the person want to commit suicide? Why do they feel that life is cruel? etc
The idea is good, but this poem has no depth.
A good poem tells a story or captures a moment.
Sorry if this is a little harsh. I wouldn't comment if I didn't see the potential.
Peace, Indie
