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Quitter
I feel like deep wrapped up in pain and trouble
And waves of strife are eating at my heart;
I lock myself inside these thoughts and wonders
And watch my loving hummingbird depart.
I wouldn’t even look me in the mirror;
I never thought my weakness was so great
And that when times are hard I’m but a quitter
Whose trust had shrunk and lost his self-respect.
I show so little passion and conviction,
I feel so small when things start going wrong;
I let my dreams die down and all my vision
Goes black like lyrics in a Manson song.
And while I never fight and get defeated
I feel unworthy of this shallow soul;
My arms are weak and dull, my heart has lifted
And all that’s left of me are shame and bones.
And waves of strife are eating at my heart;
I lock myself inside these thoughts and wonders
And watch my loving hummingbird depart.
I wouldn’t even look me in the mirror;
I never thought my weakness was so great
And that when times are hard I’m but a quitter
Whose trust had shrunk and lost his self-respect.
I show so little passion and conviction,
I feel so small when things start going wrong;
I let my dreams die down and all my vision
Goes black like lyrics in a Manson song.
And while I never fight and get defeated
I feel unworthy of this shallow soul;
My arms are weak and dull, my heart has lifted
And all that’s left of me are shame and bones.
Published 7th Mar 2010
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Anonymous
16th Mar 2012 00:59am
Good explanation of why a person just gives up in defeat.....the last 4 lines are very well done
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And while I never fight and get defeated
I feel unworthy of this shallow soul;
My arms are weak and dull, my heart has lifted
And all that’s left of me are shame and bones.
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You are the first person to mention SHAME in a poem and this is very important psychologically...if we do not acknowledge this shame and our unwillingness to fight
you have pinpointed the cause of your problems
Thus you have written your emotions into clear sight and that was a very brave thing to do
Kitty
**************************************************
And while I never fight and get defeated
I feel unworthy of this shallow soul;
My arms are weak and dull, my heart has lifted
And all that’s left of me are shame and bones.
************************************************
You are the first person to mention SHAME in a poem and this is very important psychologically...if we do not acknowledge this shame and our unwillingness to fight
you have pinpointed the cause of your problems
Thus you have written your emotions into clear sight and that was a very brave thing to do
Kitty
