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Comfort Palindrome
This underneath me;
Skin so cold and bare it shudders.
Beyond my being able,
Comfort I can’t give well.
Well- give,
Can’t I?
Comfortable being,
My beyond shudders it.
Bare and cold.
So skin me,
Underneath this.
Skin so cold and bare it shudders.
Beyond my being able,
Comfort I can’t give well.
Well- give,
Can’t I?
Comfortable being,
My beyond shudders it.
Bare and cold.
So skin me,
Underneath this.
Published 27th May 2012
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Anonymous
27th May 2012 11:51pm
Lee...I am a learner, so I had to look this up
As far as I can see...you have followed the instructions....The poem is very well written and I would call it elegant. The poem conveys a sense of coldness that the reader can feel...it is like the narrator has frozen underneath her and then put a blanket on...so nobody can hurt her anymore.....
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PALINDROME
The rules are simple enough:
You must use the same words in the first half of the poem as the second half, but
Reverse the order for the second half, and
Use a word in the middle as a bridge from the first half to the second half of the poem.
As far as I can see...you have followed the instructions....The poem is very well written and I would call it elegant. The poem conveys a sense of coldness that the reader can feel...it is like the narrator has frozen underneath her and then put a blanket on...so nobody can hurt her anymore.....
***********************************************
PALINDROME
The rules are simple enough:
You must use the same words in the first half of the poem as the second half, but
Reverse the order for the second half, and
Use a word in the middle as a bridge from the first half to the second half of the poem.
28th May 2012 11:30am
I just enjoyed Raorrick's competition so I've tried to keep going with them!!!!!!!!!!!! Thank you very much!!!!!!!!!!!!!
19th Jul 2012 6:00pm
