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In Dreams ©
Deep sleep scenes. in broken segments.
Can't make heads or tails of this.
Blurry vision . Subconscious schisms.
Turn the pages, and step on in.
To myths and tales, beyond the veils.
Unhuman things you hope aren't real.
Obtuse lessons. Shadow blessings.
Seems like reality, and I can't tell.
If there's deeper meaning,
Or mental cleaning.
Or even prophecies within.
Yet daily, I ponder the elusive wonders
that ferment in my mind
when I'm out cold.
Pulses racing. The dark embracing.
Flying high. Below your world.
But when the horizon breaks,
and now I'm awake.
How may I grasp
the oddities
my sleeping mind creates?
Can't make heads or tails of this.
Blurry vision . Subconscious schisms.
Turn the pages, and step on in.
To myths and tales, beyond the veils.
Unhuman things you hope aren't real.
Obtuse lessons. Shadow blessings.
Seems like reality, and I can't tell.
If there's deeper meaning,
Or mental cleaning.
Or even prophecies within.
Yet daily, I ponder the elusive wonders
that ferment in my mind
when I'm out cold.
Pulses racing. The dark embracing.
Flying high. Below your world.
But when the horizon breaks,
and now I'm awake.
How may I grasp
the oddities
my sleeping mind creates?
Published 26th May 2012
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17th Mar 2013 6:08pm
fun with a manic tantrum of movement and flow...
Save the commas n periods! makes an blurry format even harder to focus on and read thru... (and, but & that) shud not be in cap's. also no comma before (and)... sum bumps but still a good effort! keep grindin
Save the commas n periods! makes an blurry format even harder to focus on and read thru... (and, but & that) shud not be in cap's. also no comma before (and)... sum bumps but still a good effort! keep grindin
24th Mar 2013 9:22pm
It's meant to be in broken segments, like the dreams. It looked much better handwritten. It didn't translate into type as well as I'd hoped. I always overuse the damn commas! Hehe.
I'm not concerned much with punctuational perfection as much as content and imagery, but thanks for the feedback, I'll keep it in mind .
:)
I'm not concerned much with punctuational perfection as much as content and imagery, but thanks for the feedback, I'll keep it in mind .
:)
27th Mar 2013 00:39am
yeah! the broken format will give you the pause needed to express your emotions. less is more!;)
