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The Last Bitch
This bitch moon
bleeds me hollow
Blind birds
crazed into song
fly at my eyes in the dark
to peck and lunge
as I sit and weep rivers
I have poured out my years
paid in tortured silver
denying myself gold
past barren dawns
and empty bed
as bad dreams cascade
their cruel flow
Now love's lost heart
consumes me whole
black shadows
cursing an empty head
vying their worst
to crush my soul
beleaguered and already dead
bleeds me hollow
Blind birds
crazed into song
fly at my eyes in the dark
to peck and lunge
as I sit and weep rivers
I have poured out my years
paid in tortured silver
denying myself gold
past barren dawns
and empty bed
as bad dreams cascade
their cruel flow
Now love's lost heart
consumes me whole
black shadows
cursing an empty head
vying their worst
to crush my soul
beleaguered and already dead
Published 27th Feb 2010
| Edited 19th Jul 2012
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Anonymous
27th Feb 2010 9:04pm
........lustful.......but hopeless.........agelessly romantic - and the rhythm of this particular verse is the best I have encountered when reading any of your work published to date.
Some of your other fans may dispute this - but for me, this is right up there with anything I have read.
Brilliant.
Steven
Some of your other fans may dispute this - but for me, this is right up there with anything I have read.
Brilliant.
Steven
28th Feb 2010 10:35am
Thank you so much for all your kind words of support, Steven. They do make a difference and encourage me to continue on my writer's journey.
Anonymous
28th Feb 2010 00:51am
and absolute, like a finely carved diamond. The image of the birds 'crazed into song' is utterly, amazingly fantastic.
28th Feb 2010 12:15pm
Thanks for that great praise Jack. I'm sure I'm not worthy of such a wonderful comment, but coming from yourself it enourages me greatly - it really does.
28th Feb 2010 10:18am
This poem gives the reader a sense of hopelessness, as if the will to live has been lost. This entire poem is amazing but the last stanza is so powerfully portrayed, so sensational, it leaves me craving more.
I love it!! :)
I love it!! :)
28th Feb 2010 11:05am
Yes, I know what you mean about more, Arryn - it seems I'm struggling to get all the 'bitches' out of my system. Thanks for your kind feedback.
5th Mar 2010 11:06pm
with Jack, This piece of yours is deffo one of your best , And you should be proud of it A'
Last Stanza,- Amazing
Last Stanza,- Amazing
6th Mar 2010 7:17am
Thank you Inky - I'm glad you enjoyed it. There's nothing like getting feedback from you - it makes the day start perfectly.
