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retracts
just in
the middle
of our
kiss, she
opens
her eyes,
realizing
i am not
the man
that she
has been
dreaming
of, she
retracts
from our
kiss,
from my
arms.
the middle
of our
kiss, she
opens
her eyes,
realizing
i am not
the man
that she
has been
dreaming
of, she
retracts
from our
kiss,
from my
arms.
Published 14th Dec 2024
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15th Dec 2024 00:54am
This write is so good because it hurts so bad!
For the narrator to realize he wasn't what she wanted... is one thing. But for her to realize that... UGH!
Great shit
For the narrator to realize he wasn't what she wanted... is one thing. But for her to realize that... UGH!
Great shit
15th Dec 2024 2:00am
16th Dec 2024 7:41am
I liked it very much. Her eyes opened and opened your eyes. Run before she decides to settle for something vs. nothing. You can go from a bad date and extend it to a dozen years of married Hell by not being honest.
Be a FREEBIRD (my latest piece). Last part of a trilogy.
Be a FREEBIRD (my latest piece). Last part of a trilogy.
16th Dec 2024 7:46am
