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November
The slow roll of the twilight gray
comes to kiss the day away
in nimbostratus billow sky
and silhouettes for every eye
of leafless branch and naked twig
in lumber slumber for the sprig...
we hope to see, come what may,
after winter has had its say.
comes to kiss the day away
in nimbostratus billow sky
and silhouettes for every eye
of leafless branch and naked twig
in lumber slumber for the sprig...
we hope to see, come what may,
after winter has had its say.
Published 24th Nov 2024
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24th Nov 2024 3:43am
24th Nov 2024 8:31am
Oh, hey!
Yes, I hope you have a great time:)
The air was so fresh tonight I had to have a campfire to get it back to its regular funk.
Yes, I hope you have a great time:)
The air was so fresh tonight I had to have a campfire to get it back to its regular funk.
2nd Dec 2024 11:53am
How delightful is this! Particularly enjoyed the transition from first stanza to second
and silhouettes for every eye
of leafless branch and naked twig
Is this one of those Rispetto (?) poems?
and silhouettes for every eye
of leafless branch and naked twig
Is this one of those Rispetto (?) poems?
2nd Dec 2024 3:40pm
Well we can call this one rispetto inspired or rispetto derivative since what I discovered was that the one I titled "An Autumn Rispetto" I wrote trying to be as faithful to the rules as I could, but this one I had to use a slightly shorter syllable count per line in order to shoehorn it into a Bluesky post, and I also was a little different with the rhyme scheme, which I think the rispetto rules may allow for, but I will have to double check the form tradition rules. There's a vast world of poetic possibility between the strict rules of traditional form and free verse.
One of my favorite poets is A.E. Stallings, (professor of poetry at Oxford), whose work plays around in this gray area between free verse and formalist poetry, and while I tend to stick to the rules when I'm learning a new form, it's fun sometimes to let my hair down and see what happens, and sometimes a seemingly arbitrary techno obstacle will force me to make adjustments, like with Bluesky or Twitter.
One of my favorite poets is A.E. Stallings, (professor of poetry at Oxford), whose work plays around in this gray area between free verse and formalist poetry, and while I tend to stick to the rules when I'm learning a new form, it's fun sometimes to let my hair down and see what happens, and sometimes a seemingly arbitrary techno obstacle will force me to make adjustments, like with Bluesky or Twitter.
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