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Brutally Honest

Brutally honest

Brutally honest
Blue eyes and blond hair
Sits and listens

To Dad butcher some great songs
Sitting on a panel of one
Judge and jury

Verdict in
Sentence Down
Doesn’t worry about feelings

Says daddy this really sucks
Maybe Breakers can be a song

A tennis ball
In a fire pit of my soul

Playing some bad guitar
Or fractured fairy tales

Being 16 in a 60 year old body
Isn’t easy on my bones

Chasing youth in the solar light
Losing a pickle ball

Found a crack in his judgment
Says this wasn’t really bad

He listens with thoughts
Lays down his verdict

Guilty of being a poser
Or sing with angels

Nothing like some
Brutal truth
Written by oldmanG
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Author's Note
I wrote this based on the music to Polly by .Nirvana. It’s about my son being my best most honest critic. My daughter says everything I write is good which is a lie lol. My son on the other hand tells me I suck lol.
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